Ok, so I want to start getting into the original novels here, but idk where to start. Furthermore because I like to give my opinion and know the struggle of original authors, I hereby give the first 5 people, who recommend me their story, my opinion on around 5-10 chapters (why only 5-10 chapters one might ask... Well I am not Moses). If you don’t want me to criticise your first chapters, u can tell me which ones I should react to.
And one more thing, because my opinion is most of the time pretty... let’s say harsh, I will post them within this thread and not as a comment under the novel. I don’t want to give anybody willing to recommend novels to me a bad review. Even so, if you would like to have it as comment later on, I can also post it under your novel.
With that said, come at me. xD

    l_ovecraft I don't know your genre, if you tell, people could suggest better read for you.

    Gwahahaha. Fair Warning. My Novel had 3x standard webnovel. So you will check around 15-30 chapters of normal novels. I actually preferred you to check later chapters since the first are full of beginner authors mistakes. However start from 1 would be good.

    Endless Universes - Young Master Path - The 1368th
    https://www.webnovel.com/book/10935403706210205/Endless-Universes---Young-Master-Path---The-1368th

        https://m.webnovel.com/book/11490261006393305
        Hello I'm basically a total beginner in writing. So I really need a good opinion about my novel. I'll toughen myself up in preparation for your 'honest opinion' and anything you'll say, know that it'd be helpful for me. I don't know if you're into this genre but welp. Any opinion is fine thanks!!

          MasterRabbink

          Ok so, on Endless Universes - Young Master Path - The 1368th (I read the chapters 62-66, because I liked the name “Receiving Master Rabbinik´s Rewards”. I know it’s only 5, but your chapters are truly long af xD).
          Warning
          This may contain spoiler.
          Warning end.
          First of all, I experienced this novel as a slow-paced, light-hearted mix between slice of life and your typical cultivation story. The unique traits are: the MC is not your typical hero but a spoiled young master (I really liked this fresh idea) with a very interesting Character design; furthermore the cultivation system had its own unique and exotic traits (such as the almighty Rabbinik becoming a part of it, the novel itself as a part of its own plot and what I liked the most, the troublemeter) that I started to appreciate as I read. With that said, I won’t explain the positive side of this novel any further, because it incorporates the likable sides of both genres pretty well with its own unique traits.
          Now to the criticism; you have the typical “Slice-of-life-problem” most other novels of this genre have. It gets kind of boring really fast (no offense). But because this can be minimized as other good examples showed, here some things I see more potential in.
          You seemingly place more value on the story development than on descriptions. While this can be a good thing in some novels, I wouldn’t recommend it when going for a slow-paced/slice-of-life kind of story. Those live through the realism of your writing and with that should contain live-like descriptions.
          Following that approach of yours are many, many simplistic sentences. If those are used in a repetitive manner they will evoke a monotone feeling while reading. This doesn’t mean that you should use a lot of endless involved sentences, this is also bad. Rather just keep that in mind while writing so you can find a healthy mix.
          Another thing I see potential in is the tension of the story and the central theme. With your writing style and novel setting, a really good tension build up is almost impossible and to reassure you not needed at all. Even so, you still want to give your readers something to think about while they read your story. The solution I would suggest here is, to embrace the cultivation theme some more. And with that I don’t mean to give your MC another cheat, but rather let him train or work for his success. This gives readers a got spoon full of anticipation.
          Going on to the central theme of your story, usually this should be done like a thread that’s runs through your novel. Of course you could say now, that I have only read 5 chapters and what do I know about the central theme of your story, but it is mostly not the big things I want to turn your attention to, but rather the small things. If you talk about an action somebody does or describe a situation, you have to ask yourself what emotion or thought you want to induce into your reader. If you think about that and overlook your writing, you will soon find passages that are completely unnecessary for either plot development and/or inducing emotions within you readers. Rather you tend to write about things without a reason, just for the completeness of the things. Furthermore I would recommend not having such a huge quantity of character, cultivation aspects and side storylines. But for that I can’t judge with only reading 5 chapters, so you have to know it yourself. Adding to that, I saw on numerous occasions, that you had changes in your story paste from one sentence (almost unexpected) to another. While it is possible to do that, I would recommend preparing or revising them, to make the “thread” more clear.
          Other than that I only noticed some more minor flaws, like a frequent repetition of Names or jokes/threats (although you can use this if you to, because it is really minor, I would be careful with it), and some unnatural conversations (those are mostly ignored by the majority of people if they contribute to the story line, so also nothing major).
          In conclusion it is still obvious you are no professional, but you don’t have to be one to write an entertaining story and if you are looking for a light-hearted story this is truly entertaining and at least worth a try (I even had to smile at some points, what is definitely a plus).
          I hope I didn’t offend you by saying all that. (*kowtows to the Master Creator and almighty Rabbinik)

              l_ovecraft Thank you for that. Some reader reported 5 hours to completely read. The main idea of the novel is to make the 'Grandpa' popular. Gwahahaha.

              Joke. While that is true. The idea is to become the 'strange' one that people read after reading the other novel, so the wuxia is still fresh. Description is still a problem for this Rabbink.

                  existing

                  Ok my opinion to Sorcha Knight in the City (reading status: chapter 6)

                  So with this one I couldn’t tell jet what exact genre you were trying to do (Perhaps a mix of modern Romance with Action and a touch of supernatural?). Nevertheless I have to say definitely a creative idea to think about, when confronted with a reincarnation storyline.

                  As usual the more positive things first and the flame afterwards (xD). Every one of your characters is really likable. Although some haven’t had much screen time, I ended up liking every one. Your mode of expression has a good foundation. Nothing unique, special or exceptional good, but it its totally solid and has no major flaws within.
                  Your flaws, in my opinion, are more on the plot level of things. You have a fantastic idea of a story in your mind, but the story you wrote down is only a small fragment of the one you had in mind. You only wrote some parts and your imagination completed the rest. So for a reader, who doesn’t have your string of thoughts, it gets hard to imagen the full picture. Even if one can easily follow the storyline, the picture you have in your head as a colourful one the reader sees only black and white. You have some really irritatingly fast paste plot developments all over your story, where readers fell kind of left behind (I don’t know if that makes sense for you?). In general it is not bad to have the readers’ imagen their parts, but if you start explaining things you have to go through with it to the end or never start.
                  Good examples for it are both worlds, related to the story. I have actually no Idea how any of them is like, but you still gave some independent facts about both of them.
                  Also like Rabbinik your conversations are questionable realistic at times, but in contrast to Rabbinik I would actually advice you to work a bit on that. In some places it was pretty obvious.
                  Over all I can’t really say much more (I read around a fifth of the words compared to Rabbiniks novel xD). It is a good idea, where I see potential in.

                      Roast me too

                      Duality

                      PS: Chapters 1-4 are prologue, and I'm aware that there is some infodumping on chapters 4, 5 and 6.

                        l_ovecraft that's pretty nice of you. I hope you find a novel you like. Keep in mind that most authors get better as they write more (I only base this on my personal experience). I know I personally learned how to write better plot arcs and whatnot as I went along.

                        I don't know what sort of stories you enjoy, but if you are looking for an original high fantasy romance with action in it you can check mine out. Best of luck finding originals you fall in love with!

                        https://www.webnovel.com/book/10672212005098605/Macha's-Journey

                        Obviously, more than five people have replied, so I don't expect a review. Just know that it gets better if you do check my novel out.

                            l_ovecraft thank you very much! I'm actually having a hard time explaining my thoughts in the novel as you can see with my shallow explanations. someone has told me about it already and I'm trying to improve. Right now after reading your opinion I'm a bit clear now on how to continue my story. 🥂🥂 Cheers mate! 😂👍

                                You can try with my novelDark Magic Master if you wish. BUT my novel has a system that you would not expect much like other novels with the system giving OP things to Mc right and left

                                Three principal genres are:

                                • Action
                                • Adventure
                                • Fantasy

                                  Ruruci

                                  Edea Chronicle: Hero Summoning Conspiracy: Reading status chapter 5

                                  Warning
                                  This is going to be a very subjective and negative review. I am sorry for not giving you any better comment, but I truly disliked your story very much (some would call me hater).
                                  Warning end.

                                  As per usual starting first with the positive things, the execution of your novel is fine and I didn’t notice any flaws that overly triggered me (But tbh from some point on I didn’t really care anymore).
                                  Sadly that’s about it for positive things I can say about your novel. The whole novel is covered with clichés and let’s says inspirations from existing novels. With that I don’t want to accuse you of copying others work that is not what I meant. Rather you take so many well-established themes from other works that the mix still barley passes as original idea. It doesn’t matter if it’s Characters, Plot or World building. I couldn’t find any aspect in this novel where I could go: “Ohh look a creative twist of things.” With that comes a totally predictable storyline, that it got me yawning already after the 2nd chapter.
                                  Secondly I am truly sorry to Rabbink for saying his conversations were unnatural. Your novel has even unnatural plot development at some points. Don’t get me wrong we all read fantasy here, so nobody wants to see the plain reality. But fantasy lives and dies with its realism. If your reader can’t connect with your characters or development of the plot, that’s bad. You use both only as means to an end, as slaves serving the almighty clichés.
                                  Overall the only reason I see why your novel is doing that well, is because those clichés, themes, stigmas or however you like to call them are well-established. Keep in mind that using such clichés limits your potential and with the quantity of them I see in your novel, I am sorry to say this, but I see no potential. Maybe you will say now:” Oh but you have only read 5 chapters it gets way better in the later parts.” Well I am sorry Sir but if I don’t like the beginning of a novel and see no potential in it, I’m just not going to continue reading.

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