Hello, everyone! I'm a new, green author that started a novel.
https://m.webnovel.com/book/12173970306036805
Can you, please, at least go and take a look at it? If it was to your liking, then, please vote for it so that it went up in the ranking. Thank you for your time.
mdrm sure! :) I'm a new author as well. Can you take time to read mine too?
Here's the link: https://m.webnovel.com/book/11699377106477505
Dawsonrose thank you for the fun read! I really liked it. Keep up the good work.
Issues I've found(IMO):
1. The title - You should remove the period
2. The synopsis - 'On her journey in another world, she changes its fate and finds her happiness.'
- Should change to: 'On her journey to another world, she changes her fate and finds happiness'
3. The dialogue - This isn't a issue per se, but the dialogue format is very unique and might be confusing for some people, you should try the standard format
4. Some grammar mistakes in chapter 1
Good Points(IMO):
1. So far, your grammar is much better than a lot of original novels that I've seen(better than a lot in the top 20 - chapter 1 wise)
mdrm Suggestions based on me checking on what Misguided_Rooster said
(all for #3 and formatting)
I have a feeling you would do much better if you knew how to utilize bold, italic, and u͟n͟d͟e͟r͟l͟i͟n͟e͟d text, I suggest using these two sites and copy and paste so you can (if they are not accessible, just search for Unicode text converters)
For bold and italic: http://qaz.wtf/u/convert.cgi?text=Bold+and+Italic
For u͟n͟d͟e͟r͟l͟i͟n͟e: https://yaytext.com/underline/
And for dialogue, I suggest taking Misguided_Rooster's advice and using quotation marks at either side of those spoken words, use formatting and/or apostrophes for where you currently use quotation marks.;,;. ("=quotation mark, '=apostrophe)
Edit: I know this is tedious, but it is very helpful when reading the story.;,;.
Misguided_Rooster thank you for the feedback.
In the synopsis she changes world's fate not her own
About dialogs.. Thank you for the suggetion.
English is not my first language and I'm still learning, so any help is appretiated.
I'm a little confused about those "bold" and " underlined" parts. Where should I use them????
Also, where is the period that you are talking about? And what is that anyways????
Sorry for a lot of questions.
I'm new author too Give me a try? I started 1 week ago. My novel is 'Beyond the Mask'
mdrm
The synopsis:
I'm 38 years-old single woman that had died because I gave my heart to my dear mother. I have very reliable siblings that will take care of her in my stead.
On her journey in another world, she changes its fate and finds her happiness.
The first-person (I) becomes third-person (she, her) in just a few sentences. You should be consistent. And why not introduce the protagonist's name in the synopsis.
Regarding the dialogue
-Mirta!!! How did you get here!? I was searching for you!
Change it to
"Mirta!!! How did you get here!? I was searching for you!"
It's something of a standard. Also easier to read.
mdrm hey I also felt that maybe you need to change the way your dialogue is presented. 
For example, here's a dialogue like yours:
=Mom, it's okay.
You could change it to:
"Mom, it's okay."
To make it much pleasing to the eyes. But I really like your story! Do you have a discord? So we can communicate more! I want to share pointers with you 
mdrm Hi I just wanted to thank you for reading my new work I'm the demon lord but I died and now I'm the hero's best friend. Thank you for reading, also I'm going to read your novel, once I'm free. :)
Misguided_Rooster
Are you up to Romance Fiction? If so, would you mind taking time to read my novel as well? It's an original and my entry in the last Writing Prompts #31. Here's the link:
https://m.webnovel.com/book/12143997505993905
Thanks in advance,
Misguided_Rooster
Dawsonrose Hello, I'm a new writer, too. Would you please take time to read my novel as well?
Here's the link:
https://m.webnovel.com/book/12143997505993905
Bibliophile_Anna
'Issues' I've found(IMO):
1. The title - These types of titles are very repetitive in romance novels just like those with 'heavenly' or 'rebirth' they are kind of a turn off
2. Synopsis - Too long and some grammar mistakes. You should simplify it, you're adding too much detail
3. Grammar - Very few grammar mistakes; 'Jia Li's mother reminded her upon seeing her 𝒓𝒂𝒏(running) 𝒕𝒉𝒓𝒐𝒖𝒈𝒉(toward) the door'
Hi people! I created this thread so that new authors could get honest feedbacks and get more views. This thread does not have a leader and I'm definitely not going to be the one ( my knowledge in language and management is way too lacking).
this place is something like a chat, so feel free to speak your thoughts out, but be mindful of your tone.
Thank you and I'm sorry for telling this so late.
mdrm Thank you for this thread.
In fact, I was wondering if my novel was interesting. Could someone read my first chapter and say me if it's looks interesting? I mean, is the debut of my story make you want to read more? Is it original?
I wish to have something different even if I know that doing a non-mainstream on this site.
Thank you to give me some pointers too.my novel is: 'Beyond the Mask'
(Sorry I'm on phone, don't have the link now ')
Edit;
https://www.webnovel.com/book/12134991606975905/Beyond-the-Mask
