ihi let me present you mine

  • Raising Child System (bl)

no need to explain what a system novel is I think everyone know already : but mine is not a " help the male lead" "become the best" "last wishes system" but a .... RAISING CHILD SYSTEM. Enough of taking care of the second male lead : think more of the cute children witch we don't talk enough about ! so here is the raising child system to help young and cute child grow up to be a reliable and handsome male !

https://www.webnovel.com/book/12329032005277505/Raising-Child-System

    Hey, guys! I know this post isn't necessary, but I've found myself some time (finally) to read and review your promoted novels in this thread. Hopefully I can finish reading everything by today.

    I'm here to beg for forgiveness for any harsh reviews that might come your way or comments that may offend you in any way possible. I'm a bit particular about grammar, which is funny, since my own work has a lot of flaws. But I've been learning English practically my whole life, so I can get pretty critical with it. I'm not good at writing my own stories but I've been told that I can be quite the harsh critic (sorry for my impertinence). I don't expect you to return the... favour? If that's what you can call it... so don't feel too pressured.

    Do note that I'm a layman and thus my opinions does not matter. If possible, just ignore my reviews, please. ._.

    Apologies in advance for any rude or harsh remarks that may go your way. Really, I'm sorry.

    Thanks for recommending your works.

      ihateyounot As long as the feedback is constructive not destructive, that's all good. Constructive feedback is golden to an inspiring author.

      There's also providing feedback on the the story itself for plot holes, character impressions, flow and so forth. You can have a story that is grammatically sound, but lacks on storytelling conventions and mechanisms. Usually, this is more important to a writer than picking out their grammar. Grammar can be eventually fixed in final draft stages.

          Veronica8 That's true, but I'm quite petty so grammar is the first thing I notice in any works. It's a bad habit of mine. //sigh// It's mostly because I don't have much talent in storytelling so I can't be helpful to anyone since I lack the creative capacity to give that kind of constructive feedback. Case in point: my own novel can't hold a candle to a lot of novels in this thread in terms of creative richness. Yes this is me shamelessly plugging my own novel huehueh

              ihateyounot I'm actual cool if someone points out my grammar flaws, since LanguageTool can only point out so much for me XD. I think you're selling yourself short. I've checked your novel and it's pretty solid. Keep writing it. :)

                  MishaK Sure, although my story is YA Fantasy, Action-Adventure with Shounen Ai, so I'm not sure if it would be your cup of tea considering the protagonist is gay. I'm happy for a swap review. Let me know what story you would like me to read. Zaldizko is the story I'd like reviewed.

                  Cheers :smile:

                      Shameless plug of my novels. I hope someone will try to read hehe. Thanks~ ♥ xoxo

                      Currently a new one for a the Enemies to Lovers writing contest
                      https://www.webnovel.com/book/12818121606527605/Remember-That-I-Love-You

                      And another one which has a very slow update. I will update it soon! I'm just sorting out the chapters lol.
                      https://www.webnovel.com/book/12244122606146005/Inevitably-Trapped-With-The-Amorous-Husband

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