Chryiss Okay thanks for your input.

Chryiss Yes it's my first time writing. But ive changed a lot of the story after you read it, if you want you can try again sometime .

A shameless self-promotion? Count me in!
This is another MCU fanfic, but there is a difference from every other MCU fanfic. I don't insert tits and self-gratification s*x scenes. If you're in for a comedy-packed adventure troupe, then give it a try.

Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/13257295306279205/I'm-just-an-'Ordinary'-Human

Me too me too!
Title: Dominic
Genre: Fantasy, Supernatural, Romance
Author: me!
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/13011773506401705/Dominic
Synopsis: ''Shut up!'' I said with pure madness while I was feeling my blood boiling inside my veins. Also I was thankful for the rain which was covering my back. After all, I was sure they could not follow me now. I was smiling. ''Do not smile now, it is not the time.'' he said. But I knew this was the time I could laugh. ''Don't be scared. They cannot even see you. Mr.Ghost.'' I said while he was looking pretty upset.

here is my work. Hinder-Rella's is a spin off of Cinderella. Prologue, actual story and finish. So yes it has been completed. I also have my second book My Way To You. I have taken a darker more fantasy approach but it starts off as a 12 year old girlwho is sold to a brothel but decides to change her world. It's darker, some people could not stomach the violence in Hinder-Rella and this is more gore detailed.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/11241536305310005/Hinder-Rella

And

https://webnovel.com/book/12021185405774505

Title: Broken Caged Heart
Genre: Romance Fiction
Author: mvphoenix (me haha)
Synopsis: Greed , Money, and Power. Is this all that matters? Why does the world revolve around them? Why is it that they are important to everyone? If this is what the world has come to I want to be excluded.
This world is filthy. Is it worth living in such a place?
I am so stupid to think that I could live cleanly in such a world. I'm so unlucky.
The darkness has touched me.
Can I still hope for love?

https://www.webnovel.com/book/13041938605448705/Broken-Caged-Heart

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Any type of constructive criticism would be helpful. This noob writer would be thankful if you drop by...Thank you!
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The World Can Go to Hell For All I Care

Synopsis-

I have one straight goal. To join the army, go into battle, earn money and glory.

Oh! Wait! I ain’t some patriotic soldier to lay down my lives for the sake of the country, no that shit is for people with some loose screw.

I just want the money so I could feed my little brother and sister, their world is only what I want to protect.

Also, I want glory so I could overwrite and clean the name of my father who tarnished the family name. We became a laughing joke in the country and even mom abandoned us. No, I don’t know if he betrayed the country or not, I don’t care. But I don’t want my little kid brother and sister to face the same mockery and hatred of the people as I did.

Just to protect the smiles of the only family I have, I would do anything.

But life knows to shit on you when things were just getting good.

Click for the link here

Title: The Damn Hunter
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/12138731905986405/The-Damn-Hunter
Synopsis: Yang Guang is the last hunter protecting his city from The Damn, creatures from another universe aiming to harm humans to strengthen themselves but the damn are not the only problems that Yang Guang need to face as he ventures beyond the small city into the world and discover a secret that should not be reveal for another two thousand years.
Hope you enjoy my novel :D

PeachyPearl I checked out your second novel. Not sure if I should leave a review on there or in the forum so I'll just post it here. Sorry if it's a bit brutal but this is my honest opinion so if you have any questions about why feel free to ask.

Writing Quality: 3.5 stars
Stability of Updates: Can't really tell
Story Development: Not much has happened (too early to tell)
Character Design: 3.5 (for me it's a bit too cliche)
World Background: Not much has happened (too early to tell)

Lots of grammar mistakes in the first chapters. Things like not capitalizing in the beginning of a new sentence or switching between past and present tense. And some spelling mistakes as well. There were some run on sentences that just seemed to keep adding on. It's fine if they're split up into two sentences. Sometimes the pause that comes with an added period can make things flow better than one long sentence.

Ex.) "Though the mystery remained unchanged as to why she broke up with the one she really loved, why her friends were hyping it up saying it was a courageous decision, and why they said her breakdown wasn't caused solely because of her parting with Danish, but their 'birdy'had returned."

"Though the mystery remained unchanged as to why she broke up with the one she really loved, why her friends were hyping it up, saying it was a courageous decision. Why they had said her breakdown wasn't solely caused by her parting with Danish, but even more important than that, their 'birdy' had returned."

I added in some commas and a period while fixing the spacing between 'birdy' and had. I tried to make it flow better while keeping the main things about it.

Some sentences didn't really flow well because of you wanting to add in so much which made them a bit choppy.

Though it surprised me when in chapters 5-6 the writing "style" changed. From short and fast to longer and more detailed. Maybe it's a sign of the story evolving more? Or an expansion of the world for the reader? Just be careful to not have super long paragraphs, I have the same problem which I'm working on, whereas the long paragraphs make it harder for mobile readers to read without straining their eyes.

Your descriptions of Vyakhya were really nice and almost poetic. Loved the detail in them as well!

Though I am intrigued as to why she broke up with him, I'm sorry I can't give you a higher rating but since it's fairly new I didn't want to post a low score review on your novel. Keep working on it and just be sure to double check on your grammar.

Yuyumamoru well thanks for your reply. Actually I forgot to mention it in my post that for this novel I was only hoping for honest opinions and not really reviews because I too think it's a bit too early to ask for it. I actually only wanted to see my own novel from a reader's perspective.

As for the mistakes I made, thank you for pointing them out. I'll definitely make the needed edits.

Also, when you've time read my other novel because that's the one I was hoping a review for. Thank you again.

Uh, shameless author here...
#60 Prompt Entry (I'm a bit late lol)

Title: All Returns to Dawn
Genre: Horror & Thriller
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/13276318905288005/All-Returns-to-Dusk

Synopsis:
It's the 21st century, miasma and corruption fill the city of NeverDusk. Under the midst of all chaos, lies a hidden darkness concealed by the mask of society.

Roaming the world under the guise of the shadows, the demons seek to find their sanity as the hunters of the church point their guns at their mortal enemies.

Roxanne Heath, a high school girl, discovers that her homeroom teacher was gruesomely murdered. Soon, when a new teacher replaces her old one, Roxanne's life took a turn for a change.

'It was him! He was the one who murdered my dad!'

Within her, a hidden chilling emotion of vengeance emerges.

With only her mother’s words and a single photo, Roxanne swore to unravel the truth behind her father's murder.

Yay! Nothing! >3</

mountwolf89 Classic science fantasy? Been a while.

Guess I'll link my other book then :D

https://www.webnovel.com/book/12984272606303205/The-Taleweaver

It's, lo and behold, science fantasy ;)

PeachyPearl When I have time I'll be sure to look at your other novel too!

Yuyumamoru I look forward to your feedback. Point my mistakes in that one too. thanks

Since I just finished posting the ending of Book 1 and I haven't received much of a response, I might as well market it here a bit to get some feedback.

Title: Enlightened Empire

Synopsis: A prince sent into exile, without the means to fight back.

A young man trapped in an unfair world, without the status to bring about change.

Combined, they will have both means and status.

Armed with advanced knowledge from a strange world, will Prince Corco be able to cut through the injustice, regain his birthright and bring enlightenment to the country of his ancestors to create a paradise of true peace, equality and prosperity?

“Okay, first step: Let’s make some Brandy.”

…that’s a maybe then.

It's a political kingdom building novel, though I tried to avoid the usual trapfalls of the genre. There is a strong focus on characters and world building rather than just paraphrasing wikipedia articles (though of course the MC's tech advantage still plays a big role in the story). If that sounds appealing to you, feel heavily encouraged to check it out.