_Rain I did the review but I didn't point out the areas you could improve upon on there. Since you still had single digit reviews there and someone pointing out your shortcomings on the review section of your story can bomb the ratings and turn off readers in the end.
So, I'll just write it down here and hope you take into consideration my words.
1- Dear, the very title of your story has a problem in itself. The story is called Our Love Story but there is no space between love and story. And the first letters of both words are capitalised. You should correct that immediately as that glaring mistake shows you haven't paid attention to what's important.
2- Add in a bit more details. Your story is woefully lacking in background development. For example, you didn't even mention the name of the college where the leads are studying. Another example is where the FL meets her friends - the two girls whom she, later on, becomes close to. You have written that she knew them from her school days but you didn't add how she knew them or why they went their separate ways etc.
These details add volume to your story and help the reader connect with your characters in a better way.
3 - Some of your sentence structures are wrong and you make a few grammatical errors (verbs, pronoun and name placement etc). Look into that as well. 🙂🙂
Hope you don't take this the wrong way 🙂
One such critique on here helped me to improve my writing by leaps and bounds.
If you go and check my review section, it is filled with reviews from before I edited, full of complaints about paragraph length. I used to be so upset that why can't these reviewers say something different except harping on about my paragraph length lol 😆 which further motivated me to make the necessary changes.
I am certainly not trying to pull you down or anything of such sort. It's just that if you have the determination to post 25+ chapters I want to make sure that someone else doesn't come pointing fingers at you in the reviews or comments section as that would hurt more. On the forum, it just stays between all of us who are looking to improve our writing. 🙂🙂🙂
Also, do read my story and return the favour 🙂