ShinSungmi Done with yours too!
I would suggest describing the characters more as i have no idea how the main characters look like. It is still too early for me to judge the story but it is nice. And pleas do look up the comma splicing, might help you a lot! look it up to avoid it ahahaha xD I love how fresh, simple and light the book is but there are many things that you must take note of(grammar). Good luck author! Hope I did not get to your bad side T_T