CronosRikudos About not telling the essence of your book… Unless it’s a thriller, what’s the point of not telling? Below you have two masterpieces and their synopsis, taken from Amazon. The core is there. I want to re-read them just because of the synopsis.
I AM LEGEND SYNOPSIS
Robert Neville is the last living man on Earth ... but he is not alone. Every other man, woman and child on the planet has become a vampire, and they are hungry for Neville's blood.
By day he is the hunter, stalking the undead through the ruins of civilization. By night, he barricades himself in his home and prays for the dawn.
How long can one man survive like this?
The SF classic that inspired the blockbuster vampire movie starring Will Smith
Set on the desert planet Arrakis, Dune is the story of the boy Paul Atreides, heir to a noble family tasked with ruling an inhospitable world where the only thing of value is the “spice” melange, a drug capable of extending life and enhancing consciousness. Coveted across the known universe, melange is a prize worth killing for....
When House Atreides is betrayed, the destruction of Paul’s family will set the boy on a journey toward a destiny greater than he could ever have imagined. And as he evolves into the mysterious man known as Muad’Dib, he will bring to fruition humankind’s most ancient and unattainable dream.
Notice that both are concise and straight to the point.
When you learn to write a ‘screenplay synopsis’ you are told to keep it simple and short. One paragraph. If your story cannot be summed up in one paragraph, or two sentences, to be radical, you don’t have a story.That’s what they say.
(BTW there’s a whole method on it, it’s called the ‘snowflake method’).
When you learn to write a ‘book synopsis’ they tell you that the first ~140 characters are what will make a reader interested to click and check on your book. Or not.
But perhaps none of this is valid for WN, so please forgive me if I’m being just plain inadequate.
Often in WN people are too vague in their synopsis and the story just doesn’t stand out. In a sea of cultivation stories I’m sure you wish yours to be the chosen. But if the synopsis doesn’t catch me, I will not read the first page. I just return to the page where I can choose another. Of course I’m talking about myself. But you can do whatever you want at your own risk.
I liked the last paragraph you wrote: “I died on my way home from a lightning. After this, a god (a cultivator of the Higher Realms) reincarnated me in a universe from my own fantasies. But, just after it, this god discovered I am the reincarnation of the last person all the Higher Heavens want to see outside their seal.”
I’d be dying to know why he’s considered so problematic that the Heaven gods rather wish not to deal with him’. With one paragraph.
If you feel fancy, the excerpt of his musings could be just after a catching first paragraph. Though, for me, it’s unnecessary. I’d just skip I to the first page of your book.
Again, forgive my long long explanation, perhaps it’s just useless.
Best of lucks with your novel.