Okay, thanks for the clarification. I'll go and read your story now and post my own thoughts about it as well.

And thanks for the review and the comments, I appreciate them because it gave me a different perspective. Also, you catch on quick. Yes, I stylized the story that way on purpose because my ideas came from western books and Japanese Light Novels! I'm happy you took notice of that! :)

Anyways, how does the ratings here work? Does it have something to do with the reviews to make it appear or something? And is your story set in the MC's POV? It's quite interesting.

    Regius_Sanguis It's 2nd person — so technically, you are the MC. but yes, MCs POV.
    You need to go to the "About page" of the novel — you can leave a review from there.

      Regius_Sanguis yes I'm a Filipino!! :) Are you Filipino also? Or visited the Philippines before?

      Done posting my review via chapter comment. Will wait for the succeeding chapters so I can provide my full review. But so far so good!! And you surprised me there with the intrusion of Fate Universe or Nasuverse!! I love all their series!!!

        glaurunglives

        Kay, I just finished reading the specified chapters. I went from 51-54 chapters. I was about to go the 55, but I didn't want to keep you waiting. Overall, it's a good read. Gives me the Tolkien vibes, which I like!

        Denton is an ass though, he's certainly not the MVP of the month. Can't say I blame him of being scared for his life in that situation. XD

          The_Canary

          Hehe, I'm a Filipino as well. Proud to be, actually! Mabuhay ka, for creating a unique story. I'm still reading your story, actually. Hope you don't mind if gets delayed for a bit, but I'll make sure to comment on every chapter of your story and then post up a review. Salamat for reading my story, I appreciate it! :)

          Also, please look forward to it once I release the next chapter next week. I'm still working on it, actually. I'd be most grateful if you continue to support the story then and after that! :)

            Regius_Sanguis no problem. Take your time reading the story. Please do note that I haven't proofread yet my work so please bear with me. Hehehe

            Don't worry. I added your novel to my library. Genuinely, I'm excited what servants will appear in your novel.

              The_Canary

              It's okay. I don't mind the errors like word spelling and such. I was once like that too, then I simply got better by reading a lot of books and whatnot. What matters the most for me is the story's plot, creativity, world building and the lure of the story. So far, yours is doing a good job despite its flaws. It reminded me of the apocalyptic world of God Eater and 'Only I Level Up', what with the way monsters suddenly appeared.

              Just pour your heart and soul into the story, and I'm sure you'll do fine! :)

              Thanks for adding my story in your library, and for the stone as well. It tells me that you really enjoyed it, despite the lack of chapters. I'm glad to see that another reader has enjoyed my first official story! :)

              The_Canary Yeah, G's right. It can help you a lot, and I recommend keeping a dictionary with you as well, It is a very handy thing to have. It's your friend when you need to use alternative words to describe something! :)

              Also, look into more mythological monsters in the web. They can help you expand the story and world building!

                The_Canary Okay, Sev. Finished reading your story! :)

                Overall, it's a promising one. The only issues you need to work on is, obviously, the grammar, more on the plot cause it's kind of giving me that typical trope that you see in anime these days.

                Like 'transfer into the supernatural world, gets admitted into a magic school' and such.

                Since this is your official story, don't be afraid to be different. People may be estrange to it at first, but when they see a good story plot that has the potential to become great. Something unique, and never seen before. They will come and read that story. Even though my story is only two weeks old, I thought it wouldn't get popular, but I was proven wrong when I saw the amount of people reading it and adding it into their library.

                It gave me hope that I'm doing something right, and I hope the best for you as well! :)

                  Regius_Sanguis yes! Will try to edit the older chapters, once I have extra time. Right now, I'm just pouring all my thoughts to my new chapters. :)
                  I can only do my writings every weekend, since I have full time commitment during weekdays :(
                  But thank you again! I really appreciate the tips you gave. This made me motivated to improve my craft more!

                    The_Canary That's good to hear! :)

                    If you need new sources of ideas, I highly suggest pouring over a couple of interesting stories that is similar to genre that your story can relate. Since your story is a fantasy-adventure that has the setting in a school, I highly suggest the ones with the same genres as well. Like... RWBY or Mahouka Koukou no Rettousei.

                    The second one is very good in my opinion. In fact, some elements of my story from that LN (and anime) comes from that, it got magic, action, and the setting is also in a school. So you might want to look into it! ;)

                    Also, think about what kind of audience you are targeting. Are you targeting readers that are more into regular xianxia stories, who needs a quick fix? Or readers that are more into western fantasy?

                    Obviously, I'm of the latter since I'm a fan of western fantasy. That's why my chapters are long and detailed. It was simply done on purpose. I hope these tips and advice will be of help to you in the future, despite that it comes from someone who is also new in the writing world... (_')

                      Regius_Sanguis I'm a fan of RWBY (love this one!) and read the LN series of Mahouka Koukou Rettousei (but I got dizzy on the jargons and complex magic system in that world).

                      For the readers, I'm actually don't know yet. :( Huhuhu. Can I just say anyone who's interested in young adult fantasy (skewed more on Anime fans) hahaha. Anyways, these are the things I need to figure out. :)

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