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Okay, thanks for the clarification. I'll go and read your story now and post my own thoughts about it as well.
And thanks for the review and the comments, I appreciate them because it gave me a different perspective. Also, you catch on quick. Yes, I stylized the story that way on purpose because my ideas came from western books and Japanese Light Novels! I'm happy you took notice of that! :)
Anyways, how does the ratings here work? Does it have something to do with the reviews to make it appear or something? And is your story set in the MC's POV? It's quite interesting.