ZephyrIsMe
Ah, thanks for reviewing. Going to start your story right now. I'll review it as soon as I catch up.

Lamorakon_G Perizou
OKay then, I'll get to your stories shortly. Hope you like mine!

    ZephyrIsMe I've given you a review as well. If there is anything you'd like to ask about the review, ask away!

      @ZephyrIsMe
      I have a review for your story. It has potential, just a couple of things need to be improved on and it could become a really awesome novel.

      Please read the reply I added to the review as well. I realized after posting the review that it could be a little misleading of my impression of your story.

        https://www.webnovel.com/book/16235303506388805/The-First-Hero-Origins

        Name: The First Hero Origins
        Genre: Sci-fi
        Status: 11 Chapters (more coming soon)
        Publication: At least 2 chapters daily

        Synopsis:
        Jack Rabbit and Yjoquekart arrived on the planet Earth with two goals: collect 18 bodies to clothe their brethren with human skin and enslave the inhabitants of Earth as the previous conquest was a failure. Not only are they aliens, but they also inherent supernational powers. Can the citizens of Black Pyrite rebel and counter the aliens' attack? Will the military be involved at some point, supporting the protagonists in their fights? No one knows yet. The characters seek out answers and discover the purpose of the mysterious masks that the aliens wear. Why do they conceal their face? Does it give the supernational powers to those aliens? If so, then how can the human inherent such power and become Earth's hero?

        Comments, thoughts, reviews, and criticism would be super helpful.
        Critical feedback is much appreciated.

          Title: Emperor of Kings

          alernatetext

          Genre: Fantasy

          Tags: Kingdom building, Army building, Overpowered mc, beast companion, no harem

          Synopsis:
          A mysterious youngster named Don returning to his homeland after many years for revenge against those who harmed him and to keep a promise he made to someone he loved...
          What mysterious and powers he holds to change everything this world knows...
          This is the story of an Emperor who is going to conquer and rule everything and everyone...

          other points

          This is my first novel and writing experience so there might many mistakes, and I read in so many websites that an author have to show the readers rather than telling, I'm trying to show but I don't know if it's working without honest reviews and criticisms from readers
          it's not the best novel or anything but I'm trying my best and working to improve myself


          Emperor of Kings is a kingdom building main focused novel without harem(Sorry harem lovers)
          I'm trying to create two parallel stories for mc you'll know when you read
          Mc will be op and kind of an Antihero, i won't make him save every peerless beauties and damsel in distress
          if you like a decent novel with kingdom building I think you will like my novel

          Review swap

          Please don't copy-paste or give fake reviews to get your novel a review or rating, ill read your novel fully and give you my honest review and ratings because reading other novels make me a better writer.
          I can't give you feedback in the level of an expert what I can is telling you my honest opinion as a reader
          If you up to reading my novel fully and give a review go for it but please don't give a fake review or ratings without even reading because I saw some people do that it's better to not read at all than doing that.

          Give me your link to the novel, it may take a while but ill read your novel fully and give you my feedback

          Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/16129893106084105/Emperor-of-Kings

            don_offl I love you honest attitude and would enjoy hearing your thoughts on this short story I wrote. In return, I shall give my honest feedback on your work.

            MsJeanTee May I recommend this short? I shall take a look at your work as well.

            A brief journey

              don_offl thank you. It will take me some time to review your story and gather my thoughts as there are quite some chapters out already.

                don_offl I read your story and gave you a review. Could you please explain the issue I have with my story? We all want to fix our stories.

                  Title: IF I PUT CEO IN THE TITLE, WOULD YOU READ MY WORK? CEO

                  (NO! This isn't about CEO lol. And I change the title every now and then.)

                  Genre: Eastern Fantasy

                  Tags: Transmigration, Xianxia, Cultivation, Demons, Gender-Bender, Flashbacks, Mysterious Male Lead, Beast, Romance

                  Author: Fuku_Fuku

                  http://bit.ly/2SZOFTl

                  Synopsis:

                  Live for me, won’t you?

                  Seven years ago, three out of four nations in a continent were merged into one by the notorious young empress of the east, Mu Feng. She, who conquered the north and south, was then eventually killed by her own familiar whom her heart wholeheartedly trusted.

                  After roaming the underworld as a lone spirit for seven years, she attempted to transmigrate back to the human realm.

                  However, an accident happened!!!

                  Her soul unwittingly possessed the body of Yu Xiao, Crown Prince of the kingdom ruling the west. Where did it go wrong?

                  What's worse was that the person who killed her- the one she, who was now a 'he', wanted to avoid the most kept on crossing paths with him. But were those encounters really nothing but coincidence?

                    Bahtiyor
                    while I'm reading your novel I felt like you are telling me what's happening rather than showing me, I also make this same mistakes I heard from professional authors in Fb group that only through practice and experience we can show more than tell
                    eg:
                    Showing: As his mother switched off the light and left the room, Michael tensed. He huddled under the covers, gripped the sheets, and held his breath as the wind brushed past the curtain.

                    Telling: Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.

                    Hello, CypherWulf is back and welcome to the Cipher's Log.

                    Today I shall promote a story I wrote last year. It is my first original novel in this website. It's not that great but I hope you may give it a try. Here it is by the way...

                    Land Warrior: Greyhounds

                    The Republic of Easting a small nation in the Continent of Asea faces threats coming from inside out. Foreign or local threats poses dangers to its existence. In order to counter these a rapid modernization effort was done by the government to its military. One of the results of the modernization is the creation of the new Special Forces Unit: The 51st Greyhounds. The unit is the premier rapid reaction elite task force that can be called anytime and anywhere in the country.

                    Will these efforts be enough to safeguard the country?

                    https://www.webnovel.com/book/13802069006408505/Land-Warrior

                    don_offl Looks interesting, I will read and give a review later.

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