Luna_1101 Ok, so here's what I think:
The central idea is very original, it allows thge story to have tons of fun situations and interesting dynamics which I personally think are the strongest parts in your novel and what I think you should focus on. Most of the story elemnts work and the characters are fun to follow around. In terms of writing it's good, it gets better the further you go into the novel becoming very good! The grammar is also mostly good, there are some small errors like instead of putting "her" when referred to a female charachter you used "his", but apart from that it's pretty solid! The only thing that I really didn't like was that at first you often jumped between tenses, sometimes narrating in past simple or perfect, other times using present simple or present continuous, it's something very small but it was really bothering me at first. With that said I definetely enjoyed what I read!

      would anyone like to review swap w me?
      https://www.webnovel.com/book/embracing-the-villain's-thigh_18730976305761305
      Others have the sun, but I have you.

      • Xu Wenqi transmigrated into a dog-blooded book as the villainess! To ensure her survival, she made up her mind to hug the golden thighs of the villain. However, the villain is cold, paranoid, and ruthless. No one knows how much of a burden he has to carry being schizophrenic.

      Disclaimer: This is a warm healing novel and may not fully and accurately represent those with mental disorders, especially schizophrenia patients.

        Written by chweetsie
        TEASER:
        KC, the shy and sheltered heir of the Dostoevsky Group of Companies, experienced a number of traumatic incidents at a very young age.
        She witnessed how her parents were brutally killed when she was just 7 years old that made her a bit introverted and have some social anxieties.
        Tin, on the other hand is like a breath of fresh air. She loves to paint and express her feelings through that. She always follow her friend Sandy who always take the lead.
        Sandy, the fighter and liberated one was the most protective of KC. She’s dominant, aggressive and will do anything she thinks is good and right for KC. She doesn’t conform on what other people say.
        The two, Tin and Sandy, were tasked to take care and protect KC by none other than KC’s only family—her tita Yumi and tito Tor.
        They report to them, unknowingly to KC.
        Nikolai, on the other hand, is the most popular singer in the Philippines and KC’s soulmate, according to her.
        KC has been in love with him ever since she was in studying in high school in the States.
        She had been dreaming of meeting him in person especially that he is under the management of their recording company in the Philippines.
        She decided to work as a regular employee in the company after she took up her master’s degree in the States and go undercover to make sure that Nikolai would fall in love with her as the simple girl she really is—without the connection of the Dostoevsky’s.
        Fortunately she was able to make him fall in love with her, she thinks.
        But she doesn’t believe in sex before marriage. She wants to do it on their first night as husband and wife.
        What happens if Sandy and Tin fell in love with Nikolai as well?
        And to her KC’s shock, she is actually pregnant when she had never been intimate to any man before?

        What will happen to their intertwined lives?
        LINK:
        https://www.webnovel.com/book/intertwined-(english)_18614341005315405

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