ehh, your novel has some of the same themes as heaven's official blessing.
and I enjoyed 3/4 of that novel (HOB), (didn't really care all that much for the romance tho).
However, I don't really like reading your novel? Sorry, I dunno. HOB has mystery and humor, and a compelling intrigue that is established in the first chapter. I'll continue reading to see if my opinion changes later. Up to chapter 12 rn.
1st_Manga_KING
link it next time, I'm lazy as a Cheeto, and a Cheeto can't move, y'know.
problems with writing and tropes. also use the author's notes, it's there for a reason.
your novel has a similar beginning to two webtoons I read, something about princesses, a father who's kind of a douche, and a sexist society that the fl has to change.
I didn't like reading them.
Anyways, I dunno, I'll continue reading maybe later. Chapter 6 right now.
four novels? wow.
I don't read locked novels, but it seems like your last novel is decently popular with 200 collections, which is pretty great.
Tell me one book to read specifically, and I'll add it to my collection, but I am too tired to read four books right now.
Chapter 1: Don't do this.
If you're going to do this, make it a bit more interesting, like maybe add their favorite foods or something.
You don't want character cards.
Or,
if you want something interesting, maybe write one chapter where you incorporate all those character traits. But whatever, since you already done that, all I'm saying is make that character list more interesting.
AuHNG
I understand that we have different preferences. Still I appreciate the time you spent reading it. At least you think my writing was not bad, which was what I was going for.
This is my first time to write, so I am still trying to get the feel of it. Developing my style and trying to gauge the interest of the readers. I am slowly learning from the critics and suggestions that I am getting from people like you who are not afraid to say the truth.
I was not expecting it to be phenomenal, but if I could entertain a few readers, then it would be great. I still want to give quality books that is worthy of a person’s time, so I really wanted to improve on it.
Thanks again for saying your opinion about it.
Don't write in present for novels, except for certain scenarios, first person perspective, and interpersonal/command usages. Novels generally should be with past tense. Present tense is very exposition-heavy, like someone is describing something to you, versus actually being immersed in the novel itself.
Anyways, I'll continue reading before I add any further critique
Also that, plus romance is like a genre that I over-read. I've read at least a hundred webtoon this year, and around 50 novels? Anyways, a good majority of them have romance. I would say that only a handful are romance-oriented and I actually enjoyed.
Try to see which romance novels you really like and emulate their style.
Also stay away from tropes.
ok maybe I'll enjoy it. I like thriller.
advice replace said with different words occasionally. Not gonna say anymore, until I read more.
I skipped to the latest chapters and they show extreme development in grammar and writing abilities, but the beginning is really hard to get through. Seems like the development is good tho. I really suggest for now, going back and editing past chapters.
Here's mine if you want to take a look Sea of the Forsaken
I'll go ahead and add yours to my collection
You need to be better at establishing atmosphere for a thriller novel.
Your blurb feels like a summary for a book report rather than an actual blurb.
Anyways, gonna continue reading.
