Davidwatts6957 the first few dialogues, what were they? The mc says a lot of stuff at random. And I think even as a personality trait, that's not something you'd expect. Next, he curses way too much: Now this is just a personal opinion, so no worries.
Personally, I prefer past tense. But yours had present tense mixed with it which is like cancer to the story. It's a personal preference but most people would agree. Anyway, if you have more questions, feel free to give me a knock.

      Nr_Yet1208 Yeah I feel that I've mixed past and present ,and that'll cause confusion ! And the MC curses way too much because that's what he really is like he's bit mischievous and sometimes he is told behave himself too , but thank you so much for pointing my mistakes out

          Proteety_Promi hey I read your novel , the concept of your novel was great , the first few chapter explains many things about the MC , but sometimes I felt the actions were not well synced with the dialogues and I got confused what's happening rn . And else everything was good

          Please review my novel too
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              People whom I've given a review please do mine too. It's not nice to be selfish XD

                Davidwatts6957 hey thanks for the review. Would you mind pointing out the parts that made you feel confused? I'll try my best to make them clearer.

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                      GodlyN Done with yours!
                      I like the way you write! Though I think the synopsis could be better if you work on it. But it's your choice. So feel free to disagree.

                          Proteety_Promi

                          Thank you!

                          Yeah, I think so too and had this notion to add some color to it. 😁

                          Now that you mention it, I'll work on it immediately.

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