Epyonnn HA! GOOD SPOT. I was gonna write something else but forgot. I'll just remove it. and compress the second paragraph:

In a world where rank, blood-ties and religion are intertwined; Silika Everest lived an idyllic life as the third child of the Marquess of Oblon, spending her time causing trouble for the estate servants and playing with her siblings to her heart's content.

Until a faithful day when a game of hide and seek turned into tragedy. When she woke up, her life had turned on its head, everything she had now slipping away from her.

That day her quiet life began— an unforgiving life where all odds are stacked against her.

      Hello, my favorite thread! I have republished my novel and rebranded it (as well as rewriting) after taking in the honest advice fully. I would appreciate an honest review of where it is now (only has 5 chapters thus far), and I will give an equally honest, detailed review in return. (or 3 days' worth of powerstones if you already have your intake of honest reviews :P)

      Soulmate Game : Her Lethal Love

      Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/soulmate-game-her-lethal-love_20340245006547205
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      Synopsis:
      Everyone has a destined soulmate, and in the World of Syre, a game is played amongst four empires to find your fated half.

      Occurring every 30 years, chosen nobles and royalty are gifted with the memory of their past life and an invitation to the game by the Mercy of God. The rules are simple: find your soulmate at all costs.

      If you lose, you and your family are cursed to die within 12 months. If you win, you are gifted with the highest social class's prosperity and wealth for the rest of your life.

      Mira was a spy who reincarnated into an orphan peasant. When she receives half of her memories with an invitation to the True Half game, her first motivation is to find and save her brother.

      But why are these three handsome men always in her way? The playful Duke heir, the cold-hearted Crown Prince, and the mysterious noble Xith keep messing up her plans! Mira wants nothing to do with them—until it’s revealed that one of them is her real True Half.

      Will she find her brother?
      Will she find her soulmate?
      Will she uncover the secrets of this evil game?

      Let’s find out.

        I'm a new strand in this thread who would love an honest review.

        Title: Devil Child
        Genre: Fantasy, Action, Adventure

        Autistic and alone, Noe begins a new life at a mysterious school. Trapped in a sea of faceless people, prejudice, and pain, he has no choice but to learn to coincide with evil. In the small town of Westville, at a school erected within the heart of chaos, the incredible power that Noe possesses is awakened.

        https://www.webnovel.com/book/devil-child_19990523105255605

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          Yoan_Roturier Hey! I know this is a thread for review swipes, but I would like to be your editor.
          DM me if you are interested. Prikkrang#6083 is my discord id.

              Yoan_Roturier Hey! I know this is a thread for review swipes, but I would like to be your editor.
              DM me if you are interested. Prikkrang#6083 is my discord id.

                  @MimiTea Alright. I've read all the chapters so far. It's a good start, and I see literally nothing wrong, except for one nitpick: try not to repeat nouns and adjectives within the same two paragraphs. As a rudimentary example, someone might say, "Open this door!" Then, the first line in the next paragraph may say, "The child opened the door." It doesn't affect the reading too much, but placing two instances word "door" in close proximity leads to some choppiness. Sometimes, the sentence can fall apart if you start substituting words, so just keep in mind sentence variety (which you already do well, for the most part).

                  Since it's only the beginning of the story, I really have nothing else to say other than to keep up the good work. Let me know when you have more chapters, and I'll give them a critique as well.

                    I am back... here... with some suggestions... again.
                    I can see that some people really spend their time trying to help... @Epyonnn great work!
                    @Yoan_Roturier too.

                    sooo... at least we could give him/her a few power stones ;)
                    I am not going to corrupt anyone, but I think that's a nice way for telling 'thank you for your precious time'

                    Prikkrang

                    Hi! I don't have the means nor the time to engage in a partnership with an editor at the moment, but I'll remember your offer— if need be—when I do have them. Plus, I don't really know you for now.

                    Thank you for taking an interest in my work (assuming you read it).

                        MimiTea I’d appreciate any support, thanks! I’ve been on summer break from classes, so I have a lot of time to do stuff. I just thought it would be fun to read people’s stories and help them out with critiques.

                            Epyonnn Alright! I added your NPC novel to my library and I'll start reading it. Expect a review either today or tomorrow :)

                              Jo_J haha... I'm a little confused at what you're saying, but I already promised anyone who critiques my novel to give an equally honest, detailed review in return or 3 days' worth of powerstones if they have enough reviews. :)

                                  Epyonnn Hello, I liked the way you gave a review. I need your help with my first ever novel, cuz I am not getting any reviews and I don't know whether I should continue that novel or make some changes in the plot.

                                  Name: Mysterious Destiny of Us
                                  Genre: Fantasy Romance, time travel
                                  Synopsis:
                                  She said,
                                  "Fate is nothing but a question which the Deity throws, the answer to it is the choices we make..."
                                  He asked,
                                  "Then what about Destiny??"
                                  .....
                                  Simple minded, focused, a bit nerdy Su Yeon's life changes slowly but mysteriously when she join hands with a Doctor who is also a part of underworld and her life gets tangled with someone whom she never expected. Will she choose this life over her simple and stable life or may be she is destined to it??
                                  .
                                  .
                                  Excerpt 1:
                                  "I don't know anything else! From now on you are my Girlfriend and that is final! We will keep it secret, I will not disturb you and wait for you so you can pursue your career. But you will always be mine!"
                                  Excerpt 2:
                                  He was standing in the corner, looking at a girl who was enjoying with her colleagues, for whom he was waiting for more than 4 years. he whispered, "I think its enough of waiting now, it's time for us to be together. Little Bunny, will you accept me this time?"
                                  Book Link: https://m.webnovel.com/book/mysterious-destiny-of-us_20101912606657405
                                  Any criticism is accepted as I don't know what readers thought about my novel.

                                      MimiTea

                                      I am trying to be fair with people who spend their times reading our not perfect texts ;)

                                      @Epyonnn you really doing a great job, man.

                                          Jo_J I see... but I don’t understand since I’m already doing it? I never said I wasn’t going to do it 🤔 and promised from the beginning. I’m not a scammer or cheater, if that’s what you’re getting at... 😰

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