As hitler once said "promise 10 deliver 6"
i read till 6 and i dont understand anything about the plot form the story only thing that i get is from the Synopsis
and your introduction. its like a few chapters were cut from the beginning.
The writing was too much. it seemed to get better, but in 1-5 chaps a lot of the sentences were wired. its like i understand the words, but not the meaning of them. i cant explain really.
sometimes you say something over and over again
"She once again looked here and there to find that person. She stopped a moment ago because she felt a certain someone's presence familiar. She thought that she knows that person but don't know who it is!"
"She once again looked here and there to find that person. She stopped a moment ago because she felt a certain someone's presence familiar, but don't know who it is!"
its hard do read and i can't really explain why. when i got to the 6 chapter i was too confused many things were said many times i didn't know where i was what was going on. maybe in the later chapters it is explained better, but yeah this is what i can say about it.
Im not an expert i've read novels for like 1 year and only got into it cause of manga and anime. the story seems interesting asf. it seems that it could be a great novel, but the wording and things said over and over again should be fixed. get grammarly or something. it seems like it was put through google .
One of the most important thing for an author is to make the sentences as short as possible and get through as much meaning as possible. Anybody can just ramble on and on. (like i'm doing right now), but if you want to make a good story it has to get the meaning through. thing said once should not be said again right after (well if its for a joke then it can)
and if you cant tell im putting my words through google
and going into the future to repent for their mistakes do you mean the past?
(so in conclusion from the 6 chapter the plot that you describe is interesting, but i couldn't find it or understand it. there was no intertation, like there was some chapters missing from the beginning. there is a lot of potential for a great story, but the sentences have to make sense. 3/5. )
good luck on a great novel.