Back for the first time in a while to do a swap so hello! I want a genuine opinion on the first few chapters of my novel. (I've been suspecting that something in the opening might be turning readers away, but I really don't know if I'm getting this impression just due to a lack of readers in general.) I would like specific feedback rather than generic comments.

You can scroll through my profile to see the kinds of reviews I do as they're pretty long; if you're looking for something of this nature, they're not overly low as far as the number rating goes, but they're not a guaranteed five-star rating either so as to give my actual thoughts.

Onto the actual book...

"See You in Sunny Dreams":
https://www.webnovel.com/book/see-you-in-sunny-dreams-%5Bwlw-gl-nblm%5D_20784894105742205

Main Genres: LGBT+ (GL/Yuri mostly with NBLM and BL side couples), Fantasy

Synopsis: Ophelia Heide couldn't wait to become a new advisor for the Moon Castle and take her father's place! Well...

That was until she was saved by Leo, a fairy who protected the Galaxy Kingdom. To pay off her debt to him, she was stuck with the task of reuniting the two sides after the capricious kings had a war over... something. Not knowing where to start, she accidentally found her heart captured by the couple's daughter, Princess Koharu, but neither girl ever thought they would flirt with the boundaries of time and history to fight for their love.

Unfortunately, things weren't easy for Leo either as he worked to save the couple, unlocking the secrets of the kingdoms' administrations in the process. What he didn't expect was to find himself falling for an elusive messenger named Sinclair throughout it all, but would his heart allow them to come in?

Please reply to me if you'd like to swap, and I look forward to doing one or two of these! 🙂

    Hello! Review swap, everyone? Thank you!

    Don't forget to vote, comment, and add to the library! ^ _ ^

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    Title: Scarlette Overland
    Genre: Fantasy Romance, Action, Mystery
    Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/scarlette-overland_19923920306012005

    Synopsis
    What is the SECRET behind her name?

    “Is it just plain curiosity on your part that is why you are pestering me all over again? If that is the case then, why not uncover the mysteries that surround me all by yourself if you are that eager to know?”

    A mysterious and powerful adventurer within the whole Empire has a deep secret and that secret is known only by her and no one else. But what will happen if her secrets are slowly being revealed by the people who are hunting her from her past? What will she do?

    Scarlette Overland, the famous solo SSS-rank adventurer from Silveria Empire, the largest and most powerful Empire within the Miris Continent. A lone adventurer who prefers working solo missions rather than taking someone else or joining a party for certain reasons.

    She is an enigma to all her fellow adventurers and all of the people who knew her because no one has ever seen her real face as she kept it hidden underneath the mask she is wearing and only her unique crimson-lilac eyes that can be seen. Her identity is unknown.

    There is a reason for it. She’s hiding a SECRET. A SECRET that can only be known by her and no one else.

    But there is a saying that; ‘All secrets are bound to be revealed’

    A certain mission request that she took out of a whim and because of that, for the first time, she took a completely foreign adventurer to be her first-ever companion and along the way, old and new enemies are appearing one by one and her secrets are slowly going to be revealed and this time, Scarlette needs to face the greatest challenges that would come to her life.

    Are you ready to unveil the mysteries and secrets of her past?

    Winter Scarlette Vermilion
    @[deleted]

    EXCERPT:

    After some minutes had passed, the man chuckled as he closed the report details of the person he was looking for and a smirk appeared on his lips as he speak.

    “You are still the same as before. What a smart choice of choosing a name for you to hide. That is one aspect that I loved you the most”

    His sparkling jade long hair shines underneath the moonlight from where he stands and as he turned around to look at his aide, his mismatched golden-silver eyes had a glint of happiness and sadness at the same time as he continued.

    “Send someone to protect her in the shadows at all costs. Those people who are looking for her tried everything to block all the information about her. I won’t let them to touch her again, are we clear?”

    His voice screams authority as he said those orders to his aide, and the said aide knew what his master meant and he complied.

    “As you wish, Your Excellency”

    After that, the aide left his master alone on the balcony and the man once again looked outside to collect his thoughts as he sighed.

    “I finally found you, Scarlette Overland. My fierce wife. My Empress”

      I'm looking for more readers and I'm willing to become one to your novel. I'm not looking for a fake five star review. I want honest opinions. I will not review your book if you didn't truly read at least 10 chapters of my book. I will be able to tell.

      Comments on individual chapters are something I'm willing to do in return also. I'll add your work to my Library if you add mine.

      http://wbnv.in/a/21gifG1

      Thank you in advance!

      Hey everyone, I recently began writing a new story and I wanted give the first chapter a try
      It is called "All's Right With the World"
      https://www.webnovel.com/book/all's-right-with-the-world_22758376906336505
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      Centuries after the 4th World War has left most of the United States inhabitable, the New American Coalition conscripts children unfit for society to venture into the waste for a new age pilgrimage for the betterment of humanity.

        Title: Escape From Paradise

        Link: https://m.webnovel.com/book/escape-from-paradise_20802880806154105

        Genre: Science Fiction, Action, Mystery, Adventure

        Short synopsis: God is dead and the tears of the citizens of Paradise won't be enough to wash away the blood.
        Mwene, a gifted mechanic, believes his long lost father is the cause of this earth shattering revelation. His search for answers tangles him up in a journey to the edge of the galaxy, with the world government on his tail, where he'll find answers to god, reality and most importantly, himself.

        I am interested in a review swap

        Title: Escape From Paradise

        Link: https://m.webnovel.com/book/escape-from-paradise_20802880806154105

        Genre: Science Fiction, Action, Mystery, Adventure

        Short synopsis: God is dead and the tears of the citizens of Paradise won't be enough to wash away the blood.
        Mwene, a gifted mechanic, believes his long lost father is the cause of this earth shattering revelation. His search for answers tangles him up in a journey to the edge of the galaxy, with the world government on his tail, where he'll find answers to god, reality and most importantly, himself.

        I am interested in a review swap

          Title: Escape From Paradise

          Link: https://m.webnovel.com/book/escape-from-paradise_20802880806154105

          Genre: Science Fiction, Action, Mystery, Adventure

          Short synopsis: God is dead and the tears of the citizens of Paradise won't be enough to wash away the blood.
          Mwene, a gifted mechanic, believes his long lost father is the cause of this earth shattering revelation. His search for answers tangles him up in a journey to the edge of the galaxy, with the world government on his tail, where he'll find answers to god, reality and most importantly, himself.

          I am interested in a review swap

            I'm looking for more readers and I'm willing to become one to your novel. I'm not looking for a fake five star review. I want honest opinions. I will not review your book if you didn't truly read at least 10 chapters of my book. I will be able to tell.

            Comments on individual chapters are something I'm willing to do in return also. I'll add your work to my Library if you add mine.

            http://wbnv.in/a/21gifG1

            Thank you in advance!

            I'm looking for more readers and I'm willing to become one to your novel. I'm not looking for a fake five star review. I want honest opinions. I will not review your book if you didn't truly read at least 10 chapters of my book. I will be able to tell.

            Comments on individual chapters are something I'm willing to do in return also. I'll add your work to my Library if you add mine.

            http://wbnv.in/a/21gifG1

            Thank you in advance!

              Title: Zenith of Innate Talent

              Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/22759096105093805

              Genres: Fantasy (Male lead)

              Synopsis:

              "It's been a long time since I can remember the last time I slept peacefully without a worry. It's hard to imagine that I've returned to the past, but is this worth of your sacrifice?"

              Mumbled by the guy lying on the bed while he look in the distance across his window while reminiscing the beautiful yet tragic past of his previous lifetime.

              "Don't worry, now that I'm back I'll make sure that your sacrifice is worth and whatever happens, I'll find you," Lucas said.

              Lucas has been reincarnated from the year 2290 when humanity expanded its civilization across the galaxy using their advanced technology.

              But everything changes when Hell crawls itself up to the ground. Countless humongous portals appear all across the galaxy and different planets and the moment it appears so did the demons incarnate tread across the portal.

              It didn't take long before the destruction of human civilization escalated and they realize that humanity will be extinct if this goes on, they lose hope and chances. But in reality, Fate gave humanity its chances.

              Starting from there is the start of the appearance of 9 Celestial Human Beings.

                Title: Zenith of Innate Talent

                Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/22759096105093805

                Genres: Fantasy (Male lead)

                Synopsis:

                "It's been a long time since I can remember the last time I slept peacefully without a worry. It's hard to imagine that I've returned to the past, but is this worth of your sacrifice?"

                Mumbled by the guy lying on the bed while he look in the distance across his window while reminiscing the beautiful yet tragic past of his previous lifetime.

                "Don't worry, now that I'm back I'll make sure that your sacrifice is worth and whatever happens, I'll find you," Lucas said.

                Lucas has been reincarnated from the year 2290 when humanity expanded its civilization across the galaxy using their advanced technology.

                But everything changes when Hell crawls itself up to the ground. Countless humongous portals appear all across the galaxy and different planets and the moment it appears so did the demons incarnate tread across the portal.

                It didn't take long before the destruction of human civilization escalated and they realize that humanity will be extinct if this goes on, they lose hope and chances. But in reality, Fate gave humanity its chances.

                Starting from there is the start of the appearance of 9 Celestial Human Beings.

                  Hello, I'm Xinbai.
                  I am looking for a review swap of a book within Fantasy/Action with an antihero protagonist or OP MC. If you have a book within this genre, we can be review buddies.

                  My Book Title: The Seven Lives When I Truly Love You
                  Genres: Action (Magical Realism) with a female protagonist
                  Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-seven-lives-when-i-truly-love-you_22778743805150705

                  There is no romance although it is currently listed as Fantasy Romance.
                  Warning: Profanity and Violence (as of right now there is no extreme or explicit violence yet)

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