I'm an aspiring writer, who wrote the first few chapters of his debut novel. I would love any and all feedback on how to improve further, and whether I am able to captivate my readers
My novel is Construct of Truth on webnovel
Will wait for feedback. Hopefully I improve 
Shameless ask for help
The_Swimming_Moon I can guide you a bit, DM me on my discord "Arbor#2374".
Jaison_Arbor MORTAL DREAMS
[(https://www.webnovel.com/book/mortal-dreams_24248356706339505/noise_65150404094117010)]
What about mine?
Though i don't have discord. But i have insta with the same name crow_fog
Crow_Fog You want a review swap?
You can DM me on insta then, it's "jaison arbor"
Jaison_Arbor 'kay