Hi luoshenhua! I did a review for your book.
Here's some additional feedback:
As a fan of cultivation literature, I had no trouble understanding what you meant by the cultivation terms like
"tribulation clouds", "heart devil", and "outer sect disciple" so I enjoyed the read. I am not sure about new readers?
Maybe explain why lightening is striking her? If she passes the tribulation, where does she go? If she fails, what happens?
Yep. In conclusion, for people familiar with the terms, it's definitely a good read!
Hope this helps!
Here is the link to my work: