DeJeL I honestly feel that reviewing your work is too hard for my little knowledge. It was really good, the problem is that.. it choses its readers and not the other way around.. does that make sense? Haha 🤣🤣
I've currently read only upto chapter 5
Isekai novels are interesting. So when I read the synopsis, i became interested.
The characters.. I like MC and Carmen. Though I feel like they are somehow lacking feelings.
He found out that he just died, yet he didn't feel sadness or anything. I know, maybe he is just really really calm but I still don't find that normal. Or maybe, the author just wasn't able to clearly show his emotions in writing.
The events are kinda rushed and that makes it feel like a big info dump. I read somewhere that it is one common mistake an author could make. The author wanted to explain what he's thinking, but forgot that it should be the characters thinking instead. Try to describe everything maybe on an emotional way? I don't know if I'm making sense haha.
Chapters 1-3, although I could understand what's happening, I just really hate those long paragraphs. I have bad eyesight, and I was reading it during the night.. you know I tried hard just to read it. It was too painful for my eyes, I literally cried while reading. So I stopped that night, and continued it the next day.
Atleast after chapter 4, the paragraphs are already fine. Good work on that.
Other than those above, I have no more complains.
The world is interesting. It was a fun read. The author's style is more on the narrative side, that's good too, it was just a bit unique in webnovels.
First person perspective is also unique in this webnovel site, but it is normal in most Jap LN's.
Keep up the good work. Every chapter you write, the improvements are noticeable. Thank you for writing this awesome novel. I added it in my library and i will continue reading it.