xephyre it choses its readers and not the other way around.. does that make sense?
I understand that perfectly, and yes, that was my intention. I feel that a book that chooses you will keep you loyal, while a book that you choose you may decide to leave. I know that this will stop many from starting in the first place, but I want the few loyal fans, not just a bunch of people who may stop at any moment.;,;.
xephyre Though I feel like they are somehow lacking feelings.
I think I understand this, but if you have any suggestions on how to improve, please let me know.
xephyre He found out that he just died, yet he didn't feel sadness or anything.
Read again, he didn't die, he almost died... also, for the rest of that paragraph, I fully understand what you mean (if talking about the first chapter) but that will be touched upon in later chapters, why not much emotion was shown. Spoiler but to be blunt, he is just impulsive... so he reacted impulsively Spoiler end
xephyre Chapters 1-3, although I could understand what's happening, I just really hate those long paragraphs. I have bad eyesight, and I was reading it during the night..
I do apologize, but this won't be changed, it is a plot feature.;,;.
xephyre I added it in my library and i will continue reading it.
I love seeing such words.;,;. It allows me to know that someone likes//is willing to read, the work I spent my time to write... though I am living through the story just as much as the readers that are keeping pace since I write the chapter during the week that my readers are reading the previous chapter, and have no clue what will happen in the chapter before I write it.;,;.
Edit: Wait, I should not say I write it.;,;. I am just a humble other world manager.;,;.