If anyone will review my synopsis. I will gladly review there novel in exchange =].
After being betrayed by her guild leader, she was forced to stay in the game. She started screaming because she had just lost control of her guild. She pictured going to a bar with her friends, but could not logout.
She moved her fingers around the interface, and clicked support, but could not contact a gamemaster. Opening her inventory, she cried. There was no gear. The stakes included all items and gold. She rushed out of the stone chapel and onto the dirt road looking for a person. After bumping into a few NPCs, she noticed there was no players around. Her heartbeat began speeding up, and her fingers where moist.
A guard approached Ellen and said: “Why are you naked?” She gazed at the NPC, and said: “I lost my clothes.” The guard replied: ‘You are coming in for public indecency. Consider yourself lucky you will get food and clothes for a few days you bum.”
Ellen decided against fighting back and surrendered. She did not want a problem with the local NPC’s. The guard ‘escorted’ her past the market place and into her new prison. He then said: you will be released on October 7th
Ellen responded: “what year?” The guard responded 312.
Ellen noted that it was two years before the game started. Would she be able to contact another human soon, would she be with woman?
Just answering these questions would also be fine.
What emotion/emotions will I feel? What Path will the story take? What do you except.