DeJeL I've reviewed yours, but left out some parts. I like the story it's quite interesting albeit the slow-pace but the story didn't bother me it's something else, here's the part that I left out.
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Lacks of spacing! I'm not complaining cause I am guilty about that too.
The point of view thing. Ah, I don't know, it's just felt iffy and confusing. It's just like your eyes being yanked out and put into another person. For me anyway, or maybe...It's just my ignorance on how to write a first-person narrative.
The mixed tenses. On one part the story used past tenses, and the other part uses present tenses. Like in chapter 3, the first part uses past tenses and suddenly in the middle part where you read the Heroine point of view, it turns into using the present tenses. It's inconsistent and if you ask me, I preferred to use the past tenses, it's more manageable and easier to maneuver.
The Heroine and MC lacking some personality. I didn't find myself liking or hating the character, it's bland, the interaction seems bland, no overreaction, and they're from the modern era transferred to the middle ages and they're acting like a total saint??- No flavor, even the first kiss scene seems bland and forgettable, maybe the lack of description, the lack of tension, like that dreamy state, the art of push and pull, hormone rising kinds of thing, we know when we kissed our soulmate, our heartbeat will raise its common sense unless you kissed your sister. Mate, it's your first kiss! You were expected to feel elated, not calm, WTH!!! I'm really sorry but this scene really angers me away.
And one more thing about the MC and the Heroine. They talked in Old British sentences when they themselves were from modern time America I reckoned. Because there were busses and the MC king father was shot by a bullet; Have they gained some knowledge to speak that way, or automatically talked that way? It's nowhere established or even mention once in the chapters that I've read.
The last thing I want to mention, correct me if I'm wrong, but isn't the story takes place in like fantasy middle ages, at least from what I've seen from the description of the city? And do they know statistics already? Like that woman explaining in percentage? If the science for that world is more advanced than I thought, then don't mind me. But, if what I said is true, then my suggestion is making it simplistic like rare, only a handful of people, something like that and try to make it consistent with the background of the world.
=== I'm sorry for writing this long wall of text, It's just I really like your story I really do hence I wrote a long essay about it. Please, man, do something about the MC and the Heroine. ===