I wrote a novel of I thought you had a better life ,totaly 34 chapters,please review my story,I need a opinion to take a storyline better way

    For fans of adventure in the fantasy world, dungeon and level-up system
    With a touch of light Korean novel and easy to suck it I invite you to go
    On a journey in the wonderful and terrifying fantasy world to follow a young man to the top.
    the novel : Desire to level up
    Chapters count so far: 11
    Published in weeks: six chapters
    Synopsis
    Awakened humans who have magical energy, super abilities, and various skills to hunt monsters inside the dungeon are called Hunters.
    My name is Kim Ji-hoon "Unawakened" I work as a porter with the hunters In one of the raids we found a hidden door containing a rare artifact When we entered and looked for it a very terrifying monster attacked us.
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      Hey guys, I've been writing this fan-fiction series on and off, mostly for my entertainment and feedback, and recently, I've noticed I haven't gotten much of the latter. Initially, I was content just letting it grow organically, but I don't seem to be drawing in enough people as of late.

      So, I was wondering if anyone would like to read it and tell me what they think. I promise it's fun, has dynamic characters, tons of action, and adventure. I'd love honest feedback.

      Of course, I'd love to reciprocate.

      • XOOX replied to this.

        pinfue I've added this in my collection as soon as I reach home I'll give an honest review🙂

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