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Magus You strong point is 'undead' and evolve. I think for a webnovel. You want to make it appear in the first 5 chapter. Perhaps use a flashback or something and show he is currently an undead with capability to evolve in the beginning. (Since it becomes the topic, it would cliche the theme somewhat lots monster novel would appear, but this would be fresh in the system dominated rank).
One of my mistakes as a new author, is not giving the 'cheat' aka hook in the first 5 chapter.