Epyonnn Thank you! I did try to express in the latter chapters that the problem at first was the protag's character but I guess I need to make it more apparent. My inital plan was to start dealing with the protagonist's personality since most novels I read about shut-ins just basically transform the whole character after they transmigrated.
I appreciate the input and will work on it, you're doing good work here! Again, thanks a lot!
Epyonnn Hi! Can you also check my novel out, would like some opinions from you seeing as you can give good and understandable tips!
Here's my novel:
https://www.webnovel.com/book/transmigrated-mind_20465943505550705
Temis Will do! Thank you!
I already edited the chapters and hopefully it's easier to read
Hi, guys. I literally started just a couple of hours ago with my first 2 chapters and I feel like I'm doing something wrong. It's only 2 chapters as I've sent this but I would like an honest review of the writing I've done so far since not much of the story has been fleshed out yet and I'm still trying to introduce the characters. Thank you!
Title: Transmigrated Mind
Genre: Fantasy (Magic and whatnot)
https://www.webnovel.com/book/transmigrated-mind_20465943505550705###
Synopsis:
Here I am again, stuck in the darkness of my own room. Surrounded by thoughts that has been plaguing my mind since the day I've decided to drop out of college. Yes, that's me. John Colton. A 28 year old college dropout now leeching off his parents, refusing to make a living on his own. But no, this isn't a story about how useless of a son I am. No... This is the story of the time where I got lost in my mind and got transported to another world. A world where magic and mythical beings exist.