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yvxii Here you go! https://www.webnovel.com/book/11263812205318005/Kage-System

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Navakor

Hai ~ Here's your review ~

Title: 4/5

I like the title, it's different. There aren't many novels on here that explore this.

Cover: 4/5

The picture you have used for the cover suits the title well and it is eye-catching. The style and colour of the font is also clean and simple ^ - ^

Synopsis: 4/5

I like the length that you've kept your synopsis at. It's quite intriguing, the idea for your novel is unique and promising. There are a few places where the expression is slightly stilted, so I'd suggest restructuring those sentences a bit. Other than that, it's well written.

E.g: And in this new world, they have a very important place, to the point that each human being has a unique pet.

(I can understand what you're trying to present here, but it is a bit confusing to read.)

Writing Quality: 3.5/5

Your writing itself is quite good, and there is adequate description in your chapters. The way you have described the interactions of Arun with other characters paints a clear picture of the scene. However, something that I would suggest you work on would be your grammar and mechanics. There are moments where you seem to have forgotten to use full stops/periods at the end of sentences. Also, please read up on the usage of colons. You've used them several times in sentences where a comma would be sufficient.

Stability of Updates: 5/5

You mentioned in your synopsis that you would update one chapter a day. So far, you have kept it ~

Story Development: 3.5/5

I actually quite like where your story is going so far. In the beginning, it gave a more 'slice-of-life' feeling, relaxing and comfortable to read. However, after the seventh chapter, there's a sense of mystery being aroused. The plot starts to pick up around here too, which is a plus.

Character Design: 4/5

With each character that you introduce, you have made sure to describe their physical features and also shown a bit of their personality through their actions and dialogue. I also like how you've given personality to the pets as well, it's one of the things that I enjoyed while reading your novel. There isn't much mention of Arun's past world or his personal motivations so far, but I'm sure you will/have included them in future chapters ~

World Background: 4/5

After reading the first chapter, I liked how you weaved in a bit of information regarding the world without dumping it bluntly on the reader. The concept of having pets as 'guardian angels' is interesting, as is the [Pet Pact]. Around the eighth and ninth chapter, Arun is taken on a journey to another location. I like how you have described the scenery/landscape of the 'world', although I would suggest you to add a bit more detail. This will help you to build a clearer picture of the world in your readers' mind.

E.g: In chapter nine, you describe the landscape of the territory Arun and Astera travel over. To add more depth and allow a deeper understanding of the world (the climate, features/characteristic etc), try to add in more sensory details.

• sight, sound, smell, taste, touch.

//The climate had also changed dramatically. Due to the blistering heat, the vet was forced to remove his blouse. The sun's rays pounded down on them, and Arun lowered his head, seeking to hide from the glare.

Since they're flying, you could also mention the presence/absence of wind. While you don't have to add so much detail in every paragraph, making sure to include a few every so often will enhance the reading experience.

Do me! If you are reading 10 chapters, skip the prequels go straight to chapter 6

https://www.webnovel.com/book/11290957706315405/Daedalus

Thanks!

ImBloo

Here's your review ~ I enjoyed reading it ^ - ^

Title: 4/5

Your title is definitely unique, it's interesting.

Cover: 4/5

I'd give a five for that picture because it fits perfectly with the genre. However, where's the title? xD

Synopsis: 4/5

Oh ~ I really like your synopsis. It's very intriguing. You've given a bit of background about the world, and also introduced the protagonist. I'd suggest fixing the tenses of a few words though (e.g: roams - roam, enters - enter).

Writing Quality: 4/5

Your chapters are well-written, I really enjoyed reading through them due to the detailed descriptions. Your vocabulary is also quite good. I'm reading on my PC so some of the paragraph lengths don't bother me as much. However, you could consider separating a few of your paragraphs (mainly information about the world, an object, or a place) to make them shorter. That way, mobile readers won't be faced with text walls. In regard to grammar and mechanics, I'd recommend editing through your chapters once you've written them. There are one or two spelling mistakes which can be easily corrected.

Stability of Updates: 5/5

I'm not sure about your schedule for updates, but it's pretty consistent right now.

Story Development: 4/5

The development of your novel so far is good. You have introduced the protagonist (as well as his background and relationships), then depicted the direction of the novel. You have also hinted at a subplot/complication in the second chapter which may be important in the future, which increases the urge to continue reading. I like the action in the latest chapters, but I'd suggest adding more sensory detail to enhance your writing.

Character Design: 4/5

Your characters are designed really well. I like how you have weaved in little details that enrich the personalities of your characters. (E.g: Riley making sure to pick the burnt pancakes for himself.) This creates depth in your characters, and also demonstrates the relationship and bond between the siblings ^ - ^ The banter between the brother and sister pair is also very realistic. In regard to other characters, I like how you have incorporated Riley's thoughts about them in your descriptions. Rather than blandly listing their characteristics, you have presented them in a more fluid and natural manner.

World Background: 4/5

Like I've said to existing, I like your execution of worldbuilding. I generally don't read cyberpunk novels, however, you have written it in a way that's simple and clear to understand. I've mentioned this before above, but I enjoy how you've connected information regarding the world with Riley's thoughts and comments in your writing. This way, it's more interesting and seems more authentic.

Link to the novel: https://www.webnovel.com/book/11500790706397805
Name: Slayer
Short synopsis: The main character wakes up in a new world and starts to explore it however while on the journey he crosses path with his friend turned enemy who was the person that killed him in his old world but this person is much stronger than MC in this new world even though when they both died they had the same level of power.
The story is about MC exploring the mysteries of this new world and how the person who killed him made it into this world and why he is stronger than him. Also about how he himself came to this world.
To get a better understanding I suggest going to the novel's page and reading that synopsis.

Thanks in advance.

yvxii Thank you very much for your review ! Sorry for the optionnal factors, I forgot to say I wanted them too :x
I'll try to improve my descriptions by adding those sensory details. It is true that it adds a more immersive side to the text ! Thanks for mentionning that.
And I'll review all the chapters for the colons, you're right on this point too.