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Hey, I just read the first ten chapters of your novel. Here's your review ^ - ^

(I hope this isn't too long and is what you were looking for ; - ; )

Title: 4/5

While the concept may not be very unique (considering all the rebirth novels out there), the title is quite interesting.

Cover: 3.5/5

The picture you have chosen suits the novel well. The outline of the wolf against the black background draws attention to the scene in the center, while the flame hints at the title ('life' and 'rebirth'). However, the placement of the title is a bit awkward since the white clashes. In order to create greater emphasis, I would recommend moving it down to where the Qidian logo is. You could also move the 'by allWard' text along with it and change that to white too.

Synopsis: 3.5/5

I like the length that you've kept your synopsis at, it's short and concise. It also allows readers to instantly understand what your novel will be about. In order for your synopsis to flow better, I would suggest restructuring your sentences and downloading extensions such as Grammarly which can help you with grammar and spelling.

E.g: But everything changed when he was on his way to work, there was a police chase, he was shot by mistake.

//However, everything changed during his journey to work. There was a police chase, and he was shot by mistake.

Writing Quality: 3.5/5

I like how you have incorporated descriptions in your chapters to add more depth since many writers on here tend to just 'tell'. You don't have any paragraphs which are too long, and they all seem to be of reasonable length. Your vocabulary is also decent, so I enjoyed reading through the chapters. The only major element that I would suggest you work on would be your grammar and mechanics. There are places where you have switched tenses abruptly, used the wrong pronoun, or forgotten to add quotation marks. This can be easily fixed though, and it will allow your chapters to flow more smoothly.

Stability of Updates: 4.5/5

You mentioned in your synopsis that you would update six to seven times a week. After skimming through your TOC, I'm pretty sure that you have kept it ^ - ^

Story Development: 3.5/5

I like how the plot is going so far, it's interesting to read how Liu Yang is adjusting and living in this 'new world' which he has been transported to. If there's anything I'm a bit confused with, it's the almost instant acceptance of Liu Yang towards the Ninth World when he arrives. It is slightly jarring. Other than that, I'm enjoying it. Events seem to be picking up around the seventh chapter too ~

Character Design: 3.5/5

There isn't much description about the protagonist in the chapters that I've read, whether that be his physical features, personal motivations or backstory. However, I'm sure you have developed them in later chapters ^ - ^ I would recommend weaving in a few of these details in the earlier chapters too though, so the readers can connect more with your characters. Considering the plot of the novel, the potential for character development is high. I'm looking forward to seeing how Liu Yang will grow as the story progresses.

World Background: 4/5

You seem to have a grasp on the 'world' which you have created, considering the different species and various worlds which you have presented in the first couple of chapters. The fact that you haven't overloaded the readers with information about the creatures in Ninth World but just described a few and expanded on them is a plus. I also like how you introduced the Nine Worlds in the first chapter, the concept of them being interconnected is intriguing.