NeverLost I like the writing style. The paragraphs are short and punchy, perfect for a quick read or a binge-reading session. There aren't many typos or grammar mistakes, which already gets you a passing mark around here.

As for the actual content, I'll be honest... it's not very interesting. If you're writing an OP MC, there are two main routes: either raise the level of challenges (which most stories do) or turn the focus away from the MC's powers (like One Punch Man, where most battles are fought by other heroes and Saitama comes to finish things off or fight the final boss). If all you have is an MC breezing through all challenges, getting infinite benefits just for lifting his fingers, the result is a fairly boring story.

The sect-building aspect has lots of potential, though. If you put the MC in the position of a mysterious sect master guiding talents as they face their own challenges, that's a great way of fixing these issues and coming up with something unique. Maybe have him focus on fighting only the legendary figures, planning his sect's growth, dealing with local and global powers, etc. The "mundane" stuff should be delegated to disciples and sect elders.

For this to work, you'll need to spend more time developing the side characters and expanding the world. At this point, I'm not invested in anything or anyone, including the main character. The characters don't have compelling motivations or personalities and the world is overly simplistic. I mean, the MC can go around revealing heaven-defying secrets and no one even bothers scheming anything or just being smart and cautious about it. No one aside from the MC seems to have any actual ambition or goals. Chu Feng is the closest this novel has to an interesting character so far, and we don't even know much about him.

You might as well keep the godly OP system that gives the MC whatever he wants, since it would be weird to change things at this point. But I suggest you focus more on other characters, worldbuilding, and the plot. It also wouldn't hurt to give some character development to the MC. His characterization is pretty shallow: handsome, OP, wants to become more OP. That's it.

      GM_Serafin Much thanks for this feedback. I had actually planned in my head for Tian Long (MC) to be just like what you described. Fighting the apex powerhouses while leaving the weaker ones to his disciples and sect members.

      Actually, the chapters that are currently out could be considered to be the "Beginner Village" so you'll see the world building soon since Tian Long and the crew are about to leave the place.

      As for the characters, I'll improve their character development so they don't actually pass as "extras"... For the plot, without spoiling too much, all I can say is that it'll get better eventually, so I hope that you can give me another review in the near future.

      Thank you for this constructive criticism! I deeply appreciate it and it'll surely help me improve the novel as I continue writing it. :ok_hand:

          GM_Serafin would it be possible to get a review of my characters...? I feel it's so hard to give enough character depth and still keep the actual plot moving... haha! But the majority of the cast only appears around chapters 35... :cry: So no reviewers have actually reached that far yet...

          https://m.webnovel.com/book/11594239806435805

              daoist_om True. It'll run the risk of hijacking another author's thread. Feels bad now thinking about it. @NeverLost I'll drop my review here sometime later. Sorry about butting in this thread.

                  cola_addict Don't worry about it, although, I'll be expecting your feedback soon :joy:

                  I'll give your novel a read in a while and give a review in the review section.

                      NeverLost Thank. Your novel is in my library. Going to read daily. I will leave reviews later.

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