tara_ Hi I read the first couple chapters and I like the story line. The whole why is she stuck in a time loop of death is interesting. With more practice you could make it better. Sometimes things were explained too many times or things that didn’t really add any value to the scene were thrown in. The emotion, the flow of events, and what you were trying to convey were very good. Maybe using different words or removing certain words would make your sentences more impactful. I’m a first time writer myself so I know the struggles. Overall it’s a good storyline and interesting.

    littlehera

    I read all the chapters...Done with my reviews, your fantasy novel is amazing and I had a feeling you will make it big one day! I added your novel in my library and also voted with power and energy stone. Goodluck!

      @Lizabelle88 Thank you! Your review was really encouraging to read. :slight_smile: Good luck to you as well and keep on writing!

      @tara_ , I read your novel and left you a review. I found the premise quite interesting and the characters were well written. :slight_smile:

      Pgimz I'll bite, provided we do indeed review each other. Ie, I'm aware my novel has weaknesses and strengths, so 'everything is awesome' doesn't constitute as a review.

      In the same way I'll read and review your work accordingly.

      Transition and Restart
      Japanese manga/anime style high school romance with a splash of Sci-Fi.
      https://www.webnovel.com/book/12652502605368205/Transition-and-Restart

      I'm awaiting your response ;)

          Pgimz

          Hey Pgimz, I will find time to review your novel today before the day is over...I will inform you here if am done with it.

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