shrishthi
I always end on a positive note after giving suggestions. I donāt do a review to just to sugar coat and give a good score, no matter how much I like the story or the writer. But in the same way, I wonāt give a bad score if it was well written.
Simply from all the stories Iāve read and reviewed so far, this is what I felt when comparing, but donāt be discouraged! Writing a story takes a lot of work and never is really āperfect.ā Countless revisions and proofreading is necessary for anyone. Even the most acclaimed authors didnāt get it on the first, second, or third write!
This is only the beginning, and like I said in the review, you already have a clear idea; it just needs some elaboration and brushing up. Keep at it and youāll get there! (:
Of course, Iām no professional editor, but if you ever need specific help, Iām here to assist as a fellow writer.