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Title: My brother's friend
Synopsis: At some point he lost interest and asked Tang Lee to brief him about it later. He decided to take a stroll around the house which was actually a really large mansion. He followed a walk path which was situated in between trees. This pleased Lu Xien, he took a deep breath and smiled to himself. The path lead to the main gate and as he drew near, he heard the sound of a sweet melodious voice which crept into the deepest darkest parts of his heart a ignited a little torch. He followed the sound of the voice and glimpsed the sight of a girls high school skirt.

"Lu Xien? Lu Xien"

Lu Xien heard Tang Lee calling his name and had to regretfully turn away from his slight distraction to answer him. Tang Lee handed over the phone back to Lu Xien and at that moment his dad called. A grimace appeared across Lu Xien's face and he picked the call hesitantly.

As he spoke with his dad, Tang Lee retreated back into the house.

"Lu Xien, where the hell are you?"

The phone was silent for a while as his dad waited for an answer and getting none, proceeded with;

"I've been calling all day and you have been ignoring my calls, any ways I need you to come over tonight, there's an issue I'd like to discuss with you."

And with that, the phone went dead. If only his dad knew how much he irritated him, he wouldn't be wasting his time and saliva. But none the less, Lu Xien still had to obey his father's command to go see him, He sighed heavily to himself as he walked into the house.

He stood in the living room waiting patiently for Tang Lee at the same time scrolling through his phone. He heard the gentle sound of soft feet running down the stairs, and as he raised his head, his eyes met with the most beautiful pair of brown eyes he had ever seen, and his breath caught in his throat, his heart beating heavily.

    K_A_U

    If Lu Xien is meant to be a mandarin name, I'd just like to mention that Xien is not a real character in mandarin.

    Maybe you heard it from a friend, but if so, it might be spelled Xuan or Xian, both of which sounds similar.

    As for Tang Lee.. it's kind of weird to have a name with two surnames but whatever, you do you.

    As for your synopsis, did you write out your novel's prologue? Because it's way too long. I know some synopsis tend to drag on, but yikes, I didn't get anything on what your story is about from the synopsis except that:

    Lu Xien, our MC, lives in a mansion, is attacted to a high school girl's skirt(?), hates his father, and has his air blown out of hi lungs when he see's someone walk down the stairs. (The last one should be someone familiar to him since they did literally just walk down the stairs in his own mansion. Unless it's a thief? But isn't that a stupid thing to do in another person's house, especially when that person is rich enough to afford a mansion, so he'd undoubtably be able to afford a few bodyguards as well and... you get the gist.)

      K_A_U I agree. If it's a synopsis, it's way too long. But I'll try and spare some time and read your novel. But wanna ask if I can leave honest opinions

        Puncake LOL thanks for the criticism, I'll work on the things you mentioned.

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