Asphant Done reviewing!
Your novel/s (not sure, you have more than one novel in your novel :P) or stories, is very unique. I actually like it very much. You just need to work on your character development (which I also need to work on), grammar and extra details. Just keep on reading and in due time you would notice your improvements. That's all, and keep on writing.
EDIT:
It is also important to know the difference between in, at, and on, there are some instances where I suddenly furrow my brows because of that little mistake. I think I read something about "laying 'in' his bed." which is supposed to be 'on'.