So, I've just recently joined Webnovel and have posted my story. I waited for it to reach at least 20 chapters before I'm ready to share it out so others can read and give some review. I want an honest one and if possible, a constructive one.

Things to keep in mind:
1) It's BL as stated in the topic title. If you don't like it, why are you here? I put those on so I wouldn't cause discomfort to those who don't like BL XD
2) English is not my first language, so there will be some grammar mistake.
3) Though I have tried editing, I might still miss some.
4) The plot is somewhat... slow?

If you also want me to review yours, just drop your link too.

Anyway, here is the link to my story:

https://www.webnovel.com/book/14640041906106405/To-Rise-Again-in-the-Apocalypse

    Lin_XiaoLong understand the hit and miss responses for gay romance. Then again, romance in general is a hot topic discussion item at this place sometimes 😂

    As a writer of male gay protagonists, I'll take a look at your story.

        LiNa_Author Hello! I've just finished reading your story. But before I review, would you like an honest criticisms or would you like a sugar coated one?

            Veronica8 Aye, thank you! But yes. It's quite hard to ask people to read BL in my opinion. Because not everyone is comfortable with it 🤣🤣

                AuHNG Reviewed! I find the names funny. Really good since I'm bored atm with graduation ceremony on-going 🤣

                    lol, I just noticed... webnovel logged me on a different account... o.o

                      LiNa_Author

                      AuHNG

                      XiaoLong_Lin is also my account. I logged in using gmail on phone, but I forgot I registered in webnovel using email so... that happened 🤣🤣

                            Lin_XiaoLong

                            So I started reading your book. One advice I have is that you have to remain consistent in (basic tenses).

                            https://selfpublishingadvice.org/writing-tense/

                            So instead of he is a sect master, you would say he was a peak sect master. You are already foreshadowing that he got betrayed, and is no longer the sect master, or at least, has fallen.

                            Preposition use. Thinking back to* the events from a few days ago. You think back to a day. You don't think back on a day. The preposition changes the meaning of the sentence. Were you thinking on a day or thinking to a day?

                            With whom he had*... He has a dog vs he had a dog. He had spent time- Past perfect.

                            And remember to use synonyms for the same words. Things like desolate land could be barren, wastelands, bleak, lifeless, hollow.

                            As an author, you should focus on common everyday grammar. Nobody writes with perfect grammar unless they want to write a heavily awkward story, because some grammar rules are awkward. Some grammar rules limit your flow and good authors know when to break these rules. But you have to know the rules to break them. You don't have to be perfect at grammar, just download grammarly instead. IT's FRee.

                              Lin_XiaoLong

                              I also want you to give your writing style a bit of uniqueness. The plot can be great, but readers should be able to recognize your writing just by reading it.

                              Use more emotive language for these scenes. Show, not tell. Help the readers really transport to this new world.

                              And the plot is very interesting so far, but definitely, provide an explanation for why so and so things happen, like how does he get to this new world. I'm guessing the treasure?

                                  AuHNG Thank you! Really the kind of review I needed! I'll be sure to look up at everything later and make some suggested changes. And I do use grammarly, though sometimes I feel something is wrong with it. Like, sometimes, it just stopped working mid-writing. Maybe because I'm using old win7? XD

                                  AuHNG like how does he get to this new world. I'm guessing the treasure?

                                  As for this, I was thinking of explaining it further in the story after MC finds a clue to return to his own world. The clue will explain the connections between the two worlds. Do you think that's a bad idea?

                                        Lin_XiaoLong Au_Noob gave the advice I would've given too. Not sure how much writing experience you've had prior to webnovel. If you're new to writing, the best thing to do is write without restriction. In other words, write whatever comes out of your head into a draft format to your story theme.

                                        You're establishing a style, so you'd want to see what you're capable already. Also, don't sweat if you don't hone to your own style straight away. Establishing a style takes time and a lot of trial and error. It naturally comes into place once you gather more experience.

                                        If you want a quick fix. I recommend you spend some time doing a full story outline. Outlining is important as it makes your character design stronger. You can give characters lots of individual quirks and mannerisms according a purpose of the moment. Writing distinct characters helps hone to a style. A lot of gaming character design tutorials are great learning tools for this.

                                        Hope this helps you. All the best with your story.

                                            Veronica8 Thank you! Actually, I have the plotlines ready, but not as comprehensive as the link you gave me. I'll be sure to do so from now on! Though... do you think it's too late since I've already had until chapter 67 scheduled? 😅

                                            Should I scrap them all and rewrite/re-edit them or just let it be for now and continue on. Once the volume is finished, do the edits on the 67 chapters?

                                                Lin_XiaoLong up to you. Generally revision is the first resort. I've revised my series countless times until I formed a plot and character set I was happy with. Originally, my MC wasn't gay, but the characters dynamics worked better when he was.

                                                    Lin_XiaoLong

                                                    Just don't leave any loose strings untied. Remember to revise some major plot points, and then the rest, you can fix later.

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