Littlepunnie

Would you mind if I want to talk to you? If you've discord then #9449 is my tag number text me there, I've a few things to discuss regarding your novel <3

      kazesenken

      Hey man , I read your novel ,I added it to my library the style of your writing is exactly what I have been trying to adapt to my novel , I hope that if you read this you could read my novel and give some pointer in the reviews
      CIAO

          TOMB_DRONE
          I took a quick look. It's not that your English is that bad, the bigger problem is HOW you write. It's actually difficult to pinpoint where to start with the problems because the flow is messy and inconsistent. There's blocks of dialogue with hardly any world building to support it. Overall, it's very hard story to follow. I imagine that there are several details that are missing on paper that are in your mind as you try to imagine the scenes. Plus, the writing style keeps switching, from 1st person to 3rd person, to script-like to novel-like, grammar and punctuation all over the place.
          Basically, I get so distracted that I have no idea what the story is trying to tell me even after 6 chapters. The MC is doing stuff to get stronger, but he has a very blank character, so I have no idea what to make of him.

            https://www.webnovel.com/book/15766232106002405/Trust-in-Love

            Title: TRUST IN LOVE
            By: CailinMatthews
            Genre: Contemporary Romance

            Synopsis:
            Alex Carter lives with her aunt and has been attending Woodlands Academy for three years now.

            What? What a sad boring normal life? Nah.

            Truth is, Alex Carter is not just the only heiress to one of the biggest companies in the world but also she's pretending to be a guy at school much to her parents' dismay.

            Fortunately, this sad boring normal life leaves her off the hook from the school's notorious playboys, unecessary dramas and juicy scandals. It was going pretty smoothly.

            That is...

            Until on a Monday late afternoon when Logan Parker stops by Alex's house just in time for him to catch her with extensions in her hair, make-up on her face, heels on her feet and boobs in her dress.

            Things were about to change for sure. Despite all of Alex's precautions, someone slipped inside her walls and became part of her world. For better or for worse? That still remains to be unseen.

            Join in and be part of the biggest secret in this fiction world.

            Some character tweets:
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