fraftlle Hey I am done, I will post it on both places so you don't need to worry about it.

Well, you have got a story and I think being able to post one already takes a lot of courage.

But from what I read until now, I think you need to improve your writing.

The way your lines and sentences are arranged are confusing sometimes.

Next thing is my personal opinion, try to use onomatopoeia.

And if u wanna improve then never drop ur novel.

Good luck.

      fraftlle well if u r having that problem, then find a novel written in litRPG style like yours and observe the work

          RenuKakkar yeah, I did it.

          And I remember. You didn't reply me when I asked for the link. So don't blame me.

          And u don't need to worry about this stuff.

          With that good of a story and narrating skills. You just need to keep writing

              This is my first Novel I am not sure how to good it is cause I forget what i read about and only remember the feelings the book gives me

              https://www.webnovel.com/book/15712123705714405/The-Blizzard-swordsman

              Wren lives off of his Mother in cold, harsh world were strength and power are paramount

              With problems present in his body he only survives under her protection when she goes missing for 2 years

              His first contact with her in this time is her forcing upon him the new world of the VR game ‘New World’

              Will ‘New World help solve his body problems? Will his Fighting and Tailoring techniques flourish?

                ReincarnatedSaint
                Thanks for the review.

                I had given you the link 3 days ago. Please scroll up. Anyway, it does not matter. Thanks again.

                    alernatetext

                    Behold my masterpiece, the magnum opus of all things Isekai! Who needs some dumb otaku getting sucked into another world when reading their dose of vitamin light novel trash? I for one do the heck not! Instead of bland NEETS, we need to think...THINK GOOSE! If you are ready for a journey into another world with our snake birb overlord, click here:

                    https://www.webnovel.com/book/16607084506671505/Take-a-Gander-at-This!-The-Hero-is-a-Goose%3F

                      Hi everyone, first time writer here! I'm not quite sure yet if I'm cut out for it, but if any of you would be kind enough to read it and perhaps comment on it, then I'll be very grateful.

                      So far, I only have a few chapters but I think it already create a foundation. Here is the link to my story.

                      https://www.webnovel.com/book/15905788706386905/The-Days-When-I%E2%80%99m-With-You

                      Title: The Days When I'm With You
                      Genre: Contemporary Romance
                      Synopsis: Why do we meet if it only ends in goodbye? Why do we fall in love if it only lasts for a while? Tell me, how do you live if it’s only to survive? I once had everything until I have nothing.

                      P.S. Since I love reading light novel, I'm also open for review swap!

                      Good day! :D

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