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Umm, well first of all... I started reading through your stories, in search of a mistake I could point out, but I gave up halfway and just started enjoying your book.
You can give my book a read if you like. I won't mind if you just write something mindless on it. Mine turned out to be something similar, anyway.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/shades-of-the-new-world_18089753406363105