Mila_Alaia what do I honestly think about your novel? let me break it down in plusses and minuses
+ Ophelia is a great name
+ She journalists her days via short notes ( at least this is what I derived because of an issue ill address lateron., emotions, etc which gives the reader a very in depth perspective on her feelings.
+ The prologue is very fresh, at the end it gives the reader a good kick-start about the direction where the readers are heading
+Youve made sure to maintain the language as the characters belong to a royal family thus the mannerisms etc are matched properly
+Thea has a great personality
- NEEDS THOROUGH FORMATTING BECAUSE IT WAS A LITTLE CONFUSING FOR ME, idk about other readers
-The first chapter starts off well but the end could be more descriptive something that would lure the reader to read further about the adventures in the Forbidden forest!
-If you can, add the first chapter in the Auxillary volume instead as a PROLOGUE!
- A little character sketch or minute descriptions on how the characters looked, what their aim was, etcetera would help create a background and develop your characters, nevertheless, you could do it as the story progresses
please don't take it harshly, the best of writers go back and re-edit their work, we're all here to learn! -