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Hello my name is brandon gould i am the author of the Tylingariea Epic and I am starting a new series set in the same universe so far it is six chapters in and i would like as much feedback as possible i am aware of the grammar and puncuion if you could tell me any advice on how to improve my writing or any thing that should be improved in the book.

https://www.webnovel.com/book/arran-ember-the-last-of-the-dra'ghoul-bloodline_20065626606216405

above is the link to my book. the review for your book will be up shortly

this is the summary for the Arran Ember the last of the Dra'ghoul Bloodline series
850 years have passed since Zargorwarths defeat and the Vermillion Empires sudden surge in power over the Multiverse. Victor Silvertounge the last of the Guardians of Light, stood overseeing the balance to ensure that it did not fall into the darkness.
Victor could feel a change coming soon, the balance had been shifting and he did not know why but could sense that a Dra’ghoul was about to be born the first one since Draco Dra’ghoul
Emma Silvertounge a Syeer far stronger than any other seen before while only at the young age of sixteen walked pieces of her crimson hair fell in front of her sea-blue eyes and her freckled checks
“ Father, Who is Lupine Riddle ?” She asked Victor froze all time stood still, “ My child. Who told you about him? Victor said slowly his voice trembling with fear
Emma replied “ No one I had a dream and his name popped into my head as did Angel born and Wolfkin. What do they mean?”
Victor did not respond for a moment “ Tell me Emma did you see a Sword of Crimson Fire, a Spear of Golden Light, and an Ax with a wolf's head engraved on the hilt?”
She nodded slowly Victor sighed “ I feared as much. One last question was there a child with a dragon tattoo on his right arm?”
Emma nodded Victor refined from cursing “ my child it would seem that you are somehow linked with this new Dra’ghoul and those you saw in your vision. Do you know where he will be born?”
Emma replied, “ Haven Valley his mother Ashi Ember was just pronounced pregnant.”
Victor picked up his staff and said “ good then we will go and live in Haven Valley post haste.” Emma replied, “ but what about the balance?” Victor paused and said “ There is nothing I can do to prevent what will happen. The Balance will fall to darkness if I am here or not.
Victor turned to Emma who was looking out at the ever-expanding Space-Time Contium the images of her vision burned into her mind never to leave.
Victor placed a hand on her shoulder "We must leave post-haste the sooner we can get to the mother the better."

Emma nodded before they left she went and packed a medium sized bag with cloths, a leather bond book named Tales of Tylingariea by Damion Vixen Dorima and secered a silver blaclet onto her right wrist with a loud click the braclet clamped around her wrist buzzing and turning a dark blue..


she picked up her bag and meet Victer in front of a massive green portal that lead to the Haven. Taking one last look back at the Bridge of Reality Emma walked into the portal and the Wheels of Destiny for her and others were set into motion

      THE 7TEEN: LET THE PAIN EXIST
      https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-7teen-let-the-pain-exist_19117090906475105

      Dhruv is a 17 yr old teenager, who is a boy full of mysteries. Six months ago Dhruv's father died in a car accident and from then Dhruv hasn't had a good day ahead. From his mom's negligence towards him to school bullies, everything seems to add more and more to his misery. But things are different now, it's 17 Jan 2017 and things aren't as they were. Fate had taken it's dark turns and now police is standing on his doors, asking questions regarding the serial killings of three of his classmates. What does Dhruv has to do with it? Does Dhruv know something?
      It's not a teenage drama! it's FUCKIN murder mystery! Here, don't expect anything, things are bit twisted as.... TRUTH ISN'T WHITE ANYMORE‼️ And Pain, Let It Exist!

      Anyone for a review swap? I might take a while as I am a slow reader but I'll review your novel so anyone?

        @SEP1A I'm sorry that it took me awhile, but I have just finished reviewing your story. It was absolutely amazing!!! I cried so much, and I just couldn't stop reading. Keep up the great work!

          Nakasuka No worries at all ✨ I’m so glad that you took the time to experience my story! I wasn’t expecting your review until the weekend so it came as such a pleasant surprise! Have a great week 💖

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