heres the first episode :)

Trial Husband

Xiao Ning was born in a rich family, they always called her the adopted child even though she really wasn't, her parents despise her, even her own 'adopted' sister. Xiao Ning and her sister Xiao Ming never got along, Xiao Ning always stayed with her Aunt all the time, she really loved her Aunt.


Xiao Ning left her Aunts to go to the market so she could cook something to eat, Xiao Ning was walking down the streets, while she wasn't paying attention to the road a car came and hit her. Everything in her mind went blank, she didn't know what to do, she tried to reach for her phone while she felt like she was going to black out, she passed out before she could reach her phone. :5 YEARS LATER: Xiao Ning was in her makeup room ready for the photo shoot, her assistant came in and gave her some water Xiao Ning asked, "Ming Shio, do you think I'll be bad for this photo shoot? What if they hate me?" Ming Shio frowned while hearing those works, Ming Shio said, "Xiao Ning, I know that you'll be perfect for this! You were made for it, they won't hate you." Xiao Ning smiled, "Thank you, Ming Shio. You were always there for me when no one else was." One of the managers came in and said, "Photoshoot in 5 minutes!"

    dumpliing Xiao Ning was born in a rich family, they always called her the adopted child even though she really wasn't, her parents despise her, even her own 'adopted' sister. Xiao Ning and her sister Xiao Ming never got along, Xiao Ning always stayed with her Aunt all the time, she really loved her Aunt.

    CONFUSING. So she was the real daughter? Her Aunt is her mother?

    dumpliing Xiao Ning left her Aunts to go to the market so she could cook something to eat, Xiao Ning was walking down the streets, while she wasn't paying attention to the road a car came and hit her. Everything in her mind went blank, she didn't know what to do, she tried to reach for her phone while she felt like she was going to black out, she passed out before she could reach her phone. :5 YEARS LATER: Xiao Ning was in her makeup room ready for the photo shoot, her assistant came in and gave her some water Xiao Ning asked, "Ming Shio, do you think I'll be bad for this photo shoot? What if they hate me?" Ming Shio frowned while hearing those works, Ming Shio said, "Xiao Ning, I know that you'll be perfect for this! You were made for it, they won't hate you." Xiao Ning smiled, "Thank you, Ming Shio. You were always there for me when no one else was." One of the managers came in and said, "Photoshoot in 5 minutes!"

    I assume this is like a synopsis. I suggest you make use of the enter button and spacebar. A clustered paragraph like what you have here looks intimidating to many.

    Comments
    Why do I feel like this is similar to Hidden Marriage and BNHH? So your novel is using the same format as those? (A beautiful lady who gets bad treatment from her family and working in the entertainment industry has a business tycoon married to her?) Is n't there already one novel here called 'trial marriage' or something?

          KingBiBiK Lol I thought the same. Moreover, the name is quite similar to this one novel I forgot the name of.

          dumpliing No offense but when I first read this I thought you were mocking those cliches novels. But if you’re serious about writing this story, I wish you best of luck mate.

                @KingBiBiK well I cant answer if the aunt is the mother etc, but I did get some ideas from hidden marriage this is also my very first novel, im learning tips for making them ;)

                  @KingBiBiK i also did get an idea for the name, im really bad with names so I went around looking for ideas and I found that, and many thoughts for the story kept coming so I decided to go with this name

                    This reads like a synopsis because; you have no world building (descriptions of surroundings and characters), you just state plot information instead of letting it appear naturally in conversation or as part of reader observation, the story progresses too quickly - you need to flesh it out you're not trying to summarize it, no reasoning behind current circumstances: why is she hated? Why does she stay with aunt? It feels like these relationships are forced so you can progress the storyline. Anyway, I'm not a writer these are just things I picked up and hope could help. Good luck with the story

                      DarkShadowow No offense but when I first read this I thought you were mocking those cliches novels. But if you’re serious about writing this story, I wish you best of luck mate.

                      Lol. I thought he is copying the cliches from other novels to mock us. As I started reading I realized there is a high chance that another format using writer is in the making. Sigh

                          Trial Husband (2)

                          One of the managers came in and said, "Photoshoot in 5 minutes!", Xiao Ning touched up her makeup.

                          After 5 minutes passed the manager came in and said, "Xiao Ning, you're up!" Xiao Ning got up from her seat going onto the set for the photo shoot.

                          Xiao Ning felt very nervous as she went onto the set Ming Shio cheered her on. Xiao Ning started posing for the camera, as she kept doing it she didn't feel as nervous.

                          After the photo shoot the manager was looking at the photos he said, "Oh my! I'm impressed Xiao Ning you should come here more often, I'd like to use you as one of my models!" Xiao Ning was surprised that he said that because the manager was always strict. Xiao Ning said, "I'll think about it, I have a lot of things to do but maybe I'll give you a call once I have my answer."

                          The manager was surprised she didn't take his offer right away, mostly all the models he asked to model for him said 'yes' right away. After Xiao Ning and Ming Shio left the photo shoot the went to a coffee shop.

                          Ming Shio said, " Xiao Ning, go take a seat I'll get us our drinks! The everyday?" Xiao Ning replyed with a "mhm" Ming Shio went and ordered their coffee, Ming Shio sat beside Xiao Ning, "Xiao Ning, why don’t you take that managers offer? He seemed pretty nice."

                            dumpliing this is definitely like a mixture of Hidden Marriage, Trial Marriage and im getting vibes of other stuff. Might as well make a parody or a crossover🤔. Oh well good luck with your story!!🙂

                                hey, i see potential. well done :thumbsup:

                                  2 months later

                                  I got ideas from my favorite novels, this was also my first book! I hope you all can support me!!

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