Hey, is anyone willing to swap reviews with me? This is my very first time writing a novel so I am not too confident. I want some honest feedback and Guidance.
Title-: The Lost Heir Of The Supernaturals
Genre-: Fantasy, action, suspence, mystery.
Link-:https://m.webnovel.com/book/the-lost-heir-of-the-supernaturals_20128456405830505

Synopsis-:
Laura is a girl who has superpowers and is on a quest to find out here identity. She was adopted at a young age by a human who took care of her as her own daughter. She meets a guy, Oliver on her 18th birthday party.

For some reason, she finds him suspicious and decides to investigate him. While Investigating him, she meets a guy who is also a werewolf. His name is Max. Max offers to train her with her superpowers and after sometime she finds out her identity.

But what will happen when she will find out that all her life was a bed of roses and now she has a huge responsibility on her shoulders. What will happen when she will find out that the man who she gave her heart to, betrayed her. What will happen when she will come to know that all her life was a lie.

"What? You mean that you never loved me. Not even once? ", Laura said with tears in her eyes.
She could she that his eyes are also filled with tears but his face remains unreadable.
" No. Not even once. ", he replied with an unreadable expression and tears eyes.
" So, you just wanted me to get in your trap"
"Yes", he replied.
" But why? I thought we loved each other."
"I just needed you. I used you for my purpose because you were strongest and were the only one who could help me." and then he took out his sword

    dreamver2 Hi, I would love to review swap with you since you are offering constructive criticisms. But I'm kind of busy these days, is that okay if I review after 17th of August?

        koshi_ That's perfectly fine! (Plus, I'm a very slow reader, so it'd be nice to have some time on my end as well!)

            Looking4 Review swap.
            Read: The Grand Ghould System

            https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-grand-ghoul-system_20822637305120805

            In a world where humans were now nearly on top of the food/power chain. We explored multiple places in the galaxy. Aliens or beasts were no longer a fantasy or theory, but who knew that humans would dare enough to first act peacefully with them, and then soon later capture them in secret, experiment with them, fuse their “D’N’A” with humans.

            Of course, this was the work of the government- “The Government our one and only friend” as their motto was. Spaceships could go at near light speed, unstable portals were owned by the government. Titanium and Diamond weren’t any longer the hardest materials.

            The result of the experiments were fortunate, and people gained abilities called “QUINXs”, but not all of them were lucky enough to get one.

            One needed supernatural inherited genes to bear the power.

            Ayden Ace Wayne is one of them or the so-called ability less who couldn’t contain quinx power.

            (The “Ace” is nothing to worry about, it’s normally Ayden Wayne: MwM. Author x [The unnecessary X is for the X in my pen name]--)

            But the Matrichers in the universe wouldn’t just let their brethren get kidnapped, experimented on, and die.

            Intelligence beast’s and monster’s that were called “Originals” as the human’s powers “originated “ from, gathered together and created an allied force, the humans it called Netheriqal, some humans sided with them as they were afraid to die in war, or they were just against the experiments that were done to them. Nonetheless, these types were looked down on as “traitors” in the eyes of most.

            One war had already been, will there be another...

            Author:

            My Demon System and My Vampire System inspired. But it has almost “NO” too major similarities, okay. This is an original, well the original in vamp system, and here is not near the same stuff, okay. Original here is another name for the intelligent beasts/monsters/aliens.

            And don’t worry, the “MC” is no orphan and..not yet...And he didn’t get a box/book from some agent/military guy with glasses...I have it planned out. But he will be in some “Military School” but I have it sorted out.

            Uwu: Enjoy My Novel..so.. read n share or else...

            There will be a lot of really hard gore, torture scenes, but nothing too hard. This is inspired by Vamp System, Demon System, Tokyo Ghoul (Ofc bruh), and some other anime.

            Notice v2: I have an adventure tag on this novel, I will not make the mc go on some magical fairyland journey. But the adventure tag is for the missions and dungeons he will travel, too.
            . LOL

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