Professor_slaroM Hi! I already reviewed yours! It's so sad that you needed to tone down your story. Did you put it in the correct age restriction and a warning tag in the synopsis? This is the first time I hear that a story must be toned down.

      HANA_4345 thank you! i was reading your trial of love novel and im at chapter 1 sealed fate.

      i think using -- dashes -- like this to say the internal dialogue of the character is difficult to read. the more usual way of doing it is through 'single quotation marks', not putting anything at all or through [enclosing boxes]

      grammar is good (minor mistakes with commas but it's normal for us). i'm not a fan of romance so i can't judge your work. but what i noticed is that the readers may have a hard time relating with your MC (i finished until ruo yin's dilemma chapter). it must be in the 'characters' chapter but rarely do people read that part.

      hope this honest review helps!

        azunaima the grammar is really off putting and the way the story is told isn't really a good read. just reading the first 5 paragraphs can make the readers drop

        i skipped to chapter 12 and your writing got better. i think you just need more practice and experience

        i suggest you read top novels like lord of the mysteries, mother of learning (if you want to learn how to write fantasy mystery) and rise of the dark alpha (if you want to learn how to write fantasy romance)

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