Who wants to review the first chapter of my book?

Novel - I Want To Be The Dictator Of This World

    [unknown] hello author, how would you like me to proof-read? Should I just leave comments on the work?

      To reborn is to live
      Is a story about a 21 year old girl in a world of God's and magic

      This is my first book so any constructive feedback is welcome right now there are 2 chapters posted
      http://wbnv.in/a/9fghANq

      if you do review swap then just ping me and let me know so I could review yours thanks in advance

        Pen Name: chery_cabral
        Series: # 1 (already have 10K. reads/views so thank you!)
        Status: Completed
        Short Synopsis:
        Wander to the unknown,
        Strange magic on site
        Meet 'Beasts' of different kind.,
        My Dear Reader,
        I welcome you to
        the 'Kingdom of Alementalia'.
        "So, how did you become a Hero?'"
        "By saving Half of Them and destroying My Kind."
        Link: WebNovel: https://www.webnovel.com/book/tale-of-the-demon-hero_22212073906184805

        Series: #2
        Status: Serializing
        Short Synopsis: Wander to the unknown,
        Strange magic on site
        Meet 'Beasts' of different kind.

        My Dear Reader,
        I, the 'Catalyst', welcome you to
        My fallen Kingdom

        "They asked for more time...
        So in exchange, time,
        Itself will be taken away
        From them as well."

        Link: WebNovel: https://www.webnovel.com/book/tale-of-the-demon-ruler_22216817005998105

        Comments, reactions and etc. are highly appreciated. Thank you in advance.

          Pen Name: chery_cabral
          Series: # 1 (already have 10K. reads/views so thank you!)
          Status: Completed
          Short Synopsis:
          Wander to the unknown,
          Strange magic on site
          Meet 'Beasts' of different kind.,
          My Dear Reader,
          I welcome you to
          the 'Kingdom of Alementalia'.
          "So, how did you become a Hero?'"
          "By saving Half of Them and destroying My Kind."
          Link: WebNovel: https://www.webnovel.com/book/tale-of-the-demon-hero_22212073906184805

          Series: #2
          Status: Serializing
          Short Synopsis: Wander to the unknown,
          Strange magic on site
          Meet 'Beasts' of different kind.

          My Dear Reader,
          I, the 'Catalyst', welcome you to
          My fallen Kingdom

          "They asked for more time...
          So in exchange, time,
          Itself will be taken away
          From them as well."

          Link: WebNovel: https://www.webnovel.com/book/tale-of-the-demon-ruler_22216817005998105

          Comments, reactions and etc. are highly appreciated. Thank you in advance.

            The name of my book - our mafia love
            Pen name - author queen
            Status- ongoing

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