Rathowm Hi. I have read and had a short preview of your story.
So far, it felt like a linear story telling/narration for me due to the consistent us of pronouns especially (I).
Add a short Prologue if you must to make it more intriguing to captivate your new readers.
English Grammar and Spelling may be improved.
Thank you.
[unknown] You still haven't reviewed my novel yet. I was waiting to know your opinion the most. But if you got free time then please check it out.
Here is the link
https://m.webnovel.com/book/red-blood-century_22463517005516305
Kailykilimo Hi. I have read and had a short preview of your story.
So far, assuming that English is not your first language, the synopsis felt like it is the literal annoying translation of your actual good draft and efforts so I suggest to reduce it & make it a little shorter next time.
It also felt like a linear story telling/narration for me due to the consistent use of pronouns especially (She) that MIGHT refer to your other female characters excluding Olivia.
Find a way to relate/include the characters' POV without actually creating a bunch of paragraphs onto it.
Add a short Prologue if you must to make it more intriguing to captivate your new readers.
English Grammar and Spelling may be improved.
Thank you.
RomanceFanatic028 Hi. Oh you were? Thank you. So, here are my sole opinions about your story.
= So far, assuming that English is not your first language, here is a friendly tip: English sentences mostly starts in a CAPITAL letters and ends with a period like this.
= The synopsis also felt like it is the literal annoying translation of your actual good draft and efforts so I suggest to reduce it & make it a little shorter next time. It acts as the "banner" your story making your new readers wonder what is up next as they continue read it.
= It also felt like a boring story narration for me due to the consistent use of pronouns especially (I) since the chapters started on a POV form.
= Find a way to relate/include your characters' POV without actually creating an entire chapter of paragraphs onto it.
= Add a short Prologue if you must to make it more intriguing to captivate your new readers.
= English Grammar and Spelling may be improved.
Thank you.
Angelica2511 Hi.
I had a very short preview your story and can I ask you this question?
Are you sure you want me to give you my opinions about this? Thank you.
[unknown] I feel like you didn't read my novel properly. It is like you are copy pasting what you wrote in your previous comment. But yeah, English is not my first language and i also know that sentence start with capital and end with a period. But before writing my first chapter i was immature writer so maybe i might have made little mistakes.. but i can't agree with the fact that you said my story narration was boring because if it was not interesting then i would have never gotten 40k views on my novel. But thankyou so much for taking your time to review my book, i really appreciate it.
[unknown], of course. This is my first book that recently got contracted. I genuinely want your review. Thank you.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/system-of-legends-i-will-lead-them-all!_23117959906254205
I need one more review to get 10 on my WSA entry. Let me know if you want to swap!
[unknown]
I prefer using third party view, l don't like using POV. Are you copy pasting the comment dear?cause l can see you told every author the same comment. Thank you for reading my novel,l went through yours too. Just it's just the way you said,strange, l enjoyed it though.
Kailykilimo Welcome. Those are not "copy and paste" reviews btw. Most stories these others posted and I have read so far, has the same set of problems for starters.
RomanceFanatic028
Thank you and welcome. Btw, the number of "views/ratings" posted in our stories has nothing to do with Web Novel at all.
They already not using/ditched that "rating" system many years ago. That is what they said on the forum section. They said that "no unlocked chapters/paid privilages/no gifts" from your readers NO EARNINGS...regardless of the views and etc. Sad.
Stormzz Uh? Hi. I am planning to join as well in the WSA 2022 but Inkstone registered my story as 'excluded' since it does only shows 'SELECT' on the 'Writing contest' tab. Do you happen to know the other possible requirements in joining in this contest? Thank you.
Here, let's have a review swap!
Want a master-disciple relationship story? Check this out!
Title: Origin Court
Author: thefirespeaks
Description:
Yang Lujia, a sought-after handsome sports-driven and perfect man with outstanding family background, was killed in a plane bombing orchestrated by his so-called pals. Before he even knew it, his soul traveled through space and his supposed-to-be ending unexpectedly took turns.
Unknowingly, he set foot in a world made up of five realms where strength matters most. Then, one day, following a mission, he starts accepting disciples.
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/origin-court_22948754706433205###
Here, let's have a review swap!
Want a master-disciple relationship story? Check this out!
Title: Origin Court
Author: thefirespeaks
Description:
Yang Lujia, a sought-after handsome sports-driven and perfect man with outstanding family background, was killed in a plane bombing orchestrated by his so-called pals. Before he even knew it, his soul traveled through space and his supposed-to-be ending unexpectedly took turns.
Unknowingly, he set foot in a world made up of five realms where strength matters most. Then, one day, following a mission, he starts accepting disciples.
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/origin-court_22948754706433205###
chery_cabral
I'm not sure. Best thing I could suggest is to check the WSA tab in inkstone (not the one under the writing contest section) and look at the various genres of the contest.
Anyone wanna swap? I'll review yours as soon as I can ^^
Title: This is a Beta Test? - A Literally Broken System
Tags: SYSTEM, COMEDY, VIDEOGAME, ADVENTURE, TRANSMIGRATION
SYNOPSIS:
"Why ship a game that isn't even complete!?"
I don't know! Why don't you at least tell me what to fix so that we won't die?!
Moriya didn't even think getting sucked into a different world was possible. Whether being a realist or being a straight-up pessimist, he never believed that the day when he'd be warped into a world entirely unlike his own would even happen. After all, why should it, right?
But then... It actually happened.
Finding himself inside the setting of an upcoming game, Moriya wandered in awe at the sight of strange environments, the various state powers vying for supremacy over the vast expanse of the seas. Hell, even infinite worlds and stars, [The Seams] seemingly had it all. Unfortunately, there was just one problem: the game was literally broken right from the start.
Joined by a colorfully dysfunctional cast and the game world's actual developer, watch as Moriya struggles with bugs and glitches as he navigates this new world. Witness our valiant hero deal with the most infuriating and rage-inducing aspects of gaming in real life. And what if... Just what if, he actually learns how to wield these ridiculous errors to his advantage?
ChellyArks Sure let's do Review swap.
Here is my novel's link:- https://m.webnovel.com/book/red-blood-century_22463517005516305
Stormzz Thank you for the response.
