I like the concept and the way it was written but, stay on one point of view. You mix between the first person and the third.
Review Swap here.
Moonwriting done with yours
It was good by the way, already added I my ibrary
SophocleS hey sorry but I can't understand What are you attempting to say? Could you please provide me with an explanation?
SophocleS by the way gave me your link so I can review yours too 
Is anyone for a review swap??
Altansarnai I am going to review yours, here's my link https://www.webnovel.com/book/survive-as-long-as-you-can!!_24103954106172105
JaRi09 I am going to review yours, here's my link https://www.webnovel.com/book/survive-as-long-as-you-can!!_24103954106172105
Maryam_Mayo Done here’s mine http://wbnv.in/a/6egnYDW
https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/23679187305206305?utm_source=writerShare&utm_campaign=4315053720
Interested in a review swap, thanks in advance UwU
Your story is written from two point of views. First-person and Third Person Point of View and it can be confusing so to stick to one.
_DreamWeaver I have reviewed yours, waiting for review
SophocleS I have reviewed yours, waiting for review
_DreamWeaver I am interested here's, my link
https://www.webnovel.com/book/are-you-sure-you-are-safe-with-me_24000252806349805
do mine and I'll do yours
SophocleS ah okay I'll try to overcome this in the upcoming episodes
Is anyone interested in a review swap?
here's the link
do let me know if you are
https://www.webnovel.com/book/are-you-sure-you-are-safe-with-me_24000252806349805