Hello Fellow Readers/Writers,
I am an original author who is seeking reviews on my story. Being in the 200's on the rankings I doubt anyone has heard of me but I want to learn what people think of my writing. The good and the bad.
So if you have the time please review. I will cherish it. I really need that motivation. Let me know what your thoughts. I wouldn't say no to votes either. ;)
Thanks.
I hope you put the link or even the name of your books
Ill try
Hi, I read through your first five chapters.
Good -
I see the creativity in the cultivation system and the world.
Grammar is decent.
Dialogue is decent.
The chapters are long.
Bad -
Grammar could be greatly improved, especially with the usage of commas. Commas really help organize sentences and separate ideas from each other. I think you're missing commas in every other sentence that requires it. Also, you have some dialogue that needs punctuation.
The chapters are way too long for me (3k+ words). My brain turned off near the end of your chapters.
Could use more description.
Could work on dialogue to make it more natural sounding.
I can't really comment on the plot since I've only read the first five chapters.
Good luck.
DreamingSky done reviewing
I leave my advice in my review, check it if you have time
Thank you for your advice. I appreciate it Chained Soul.
Thanks Syz. The reason behind the dialogue is lack of italics. As for the size of the chapters I think your absolutely right. I think about 2k words is the optimal size. I will restructure and adapt my story according to what I think will work best.
