Overall I enjoyed it, I like the idea behind the storyline. I would say sometimes it can feel a little over-explaining in dialogue when perhaps the characters thoughts may be more relevant- for example the castles walls having ears.
My only other comment would be to try to not jump into a new setting too quickly without perhaps having more rationale behind it.
I am new to writing so I don't doubt that my ideas might not be perfect but they're only my own comments it looks good so far.
Please have a look at mine I welcome comments http://wbnv.in/a/c4hYByx

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    In the boring life of teenager Eddie Ito, he has but one wish. "If I only had superpowers, what if I were a superhero. Or something like that". Luckily, a chance with a magical portal whisks him into the legendary world of Altera, and it's country of Marigold. We now get to follow Eddie on his adventure in a new world with powerful magicians, that have a slight penchant for trouble. Through lucrative adventures all the way to save the world from destruction.

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        In the boring life of teenager Eddie Ito, he has but one wish. "If I only had superpowers, what if I were a superhero. Or something like that". Luckily, a chance with a magical portal whisks him into the legendary world of Altera, and it's country of Marigold. We now get to follow Eddie on his adventure in a new world with powerful magicians, that have a slight penchant for trouble. Through lucrative adventures all the way to save the world from destruction.

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            In the boring life of teenager Eddie Ito, he has but one wish. "If I only had superpowers, what if I were a superhero. Or something like that". Luckily, a chance with a magical portal whisks him into the legendary world of Altera, and it's country of Marigold. We now get to follow Eddie on his adventure in a new world with powerful magicians, that have a slight penchant for trouble. Through lucrative adventures all the way to save the world from destruction.

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