L0ST_IN_TIME Hello, I checked yours first. One thing I can comment is that your way of writing is pretty good, even better than mine. But was the symopsis interestingh for the readers to start reading your book? No. Was the first chapter interesting enough for the readers to read the next one? At first it was but then it ended with nothing to expect with the first chapter. As what Ive noticed from most books, you can check out wvery successful and trending books out there and you'll see that they ended the first chapter with something interesting. So you might wanna work on your first chapter and synopsis. This is only my opinion, up to you if you want to listen to it~