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Your story isn't bad for a beginner but there are several points one needs to pay attention to when writing. First is grammar; proper spelling and punctuation as well as diction makes what you write easier for others to read. As such before posting chapters you should triple-check what you've written to make sure it makes sense and flows smoothly. Another thing is that while your idea isn't bad it's not good either. Currently it's at a stage where it can be refined and either become better or become worse. In other words be more decisive about the plot and the direction you want to take this story. You might be able to understand the intent behind the story by reading the chapter but the readers don't know what you're thinking so you have to phrase things in a way that they're able to tell what you want to convey based on what you wrote. I hope you don't take any offense towards what I'm saying as I'm really just trying to help you improve. Writing is a hard process and it's not something that can be easily mastered. I think it's admirable that you're taking the effort to actually come up with these ideas and write them down to create a feasible story. I'm sure that as you continue writing and gain more experience that you'll quickly become a much better writer. Until then I'll be making sure to keep an eye on your story. Good luck ☆ !