I just got a +??? and though I like a good mystery, I didn't get power stones, energy stones, or spirit stones. I'm flustered as the normal daily 8-9 Spirit Stones could've made me have enough to buy another chapter.
BeyondBreaking
- Apr 23, 2024
- Joined Dec 21, 2017
FilledWithHope That's a broad statement is it not? Though I've seen a bit of both where some complicated equation was utilized or just some checking balances; I don't think that equates that you saying over half the writers don't know math.
StenDuring Comment: Great job, you've set up the atmosphere quite well of how dreary the setting is. You can somehow surmise how the world functions and what turns it around, a harsh reality that all must encounter if they were thrown in those situation.
Some Criticism: Only some minor grammar and sentence structure mistakes. Repetition can be used as an art but if it gets too repetitive, it drives the story away and the immersion of the reader. A lot of commas; commas are used to join two independent clauses together. Some of the things you've joined with commas should be replaced with a semicolon to mix two dependent clauses together. Common mistakes writer do and have it fixed when they proofread and such. Though I'm in no position since I also repeat these mistakes and keep them in there promising myself I will fix them.
Anything else but that, you've perfectly driven the story quite far.
So here's my excerpt, though I fear it might not work because it has 50 more words.
Book Title - Fallen Throne - Chapter 4
A bright shining light stood near the dim altar. With what little radiance it had, it illuminated the crest of a skull engulfed in its own wing made with a grimy stone material.
The man could not believe his eyes, his generation, out of all other legendary figures in his society, he would be the one to summon a Fallen?
He crept up a stack of books meticulously stacked with each foreboding literary.
Using his finger, stroking his finger by the spine of each book placed.
All had dark tones in each their title in each respected ancient languages.
Picking up the one he wished for, a book that had no design whatsoever, a design that would not alarm the kingdoms of their premise. This was their holy book, their bible that they adhere to follow.
Flipping each individual page in a quick manner, licking his finger as if it was dire.
He pulled up the page that he remembered in a perfect symphony.
"Act 1, Once the succeedings have been done to summon a Fallen, he will use the society as his loyal subjects to create his kingdom. Oh, for so long have I wished to meet our king, to think I have done it!"
Similar to all his other ones, this one had a much lighter aura, years of work placed into this one event.
"The scriptures! The scriptures! To think W-I've finally succeeded!"
He wished he could cry right now, but his old age was never able to muster up the energy to do so. What came out was just a dry heave of sorts and writhing from excitement.
As the light died down, the figure of a dormant flame descended from the sky, a bright light undermined the vessel fit for his reign.
Synchronized by magic law, the light dare tried to break the light, not adhering to the realm's law.
It continued to break the efforts of the realm trying to secure their boundaries between the others. Each forming a magic seal before breaking.
But just had it been done, the soul began meshing with the newly found vessel, connecting itself to the brain and heart, seeping to every pore of the body.
This was not the last of the fire, but a reckoning to all. The magic seal that hid them from the world had shattered due to its ferocity.
The light continued to radiate in the night sky, bringing the once tranquil nature into a ceasefire.
Here's a small bump until I get at least 2-3 entries with some ample amount of likes to the entries. I'm gonna continue bumping this with the belief someone would care unless told otherwise. :)
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So I've been surfing the internet (if any still use that term anymore) in order to find more hidden gems of novels to read, in which I stumbled upon another forum of a translation site. If you couldn't guess from the title, it is from Wuxiaworld and they had a contest in creating their own martial artist based around Soul Land, or Douluo Dalu.
I was heavily intrigued and wanted to partake, but alas it was closed off so nobody could use the thread anymore. Or that's just me and I'm unable to post on the discussion, which I find absurd.So why not bring it here and allow the creativity of the Webnovel community to show them.
Simple brackets, every week, there will be a contest with a specific theme that I will choose or by the popular census to veto my theme and allow the community to decide by poll.
Winner chosen by the community will have a small short story narrating a specific part of their travel or story. If you do not contact me either on this forum or by my discord (Aetoile#7202), I will free form a narrative for your character on my perspective. If you do contact me, you'll have to tell me how you want the narrative to unfold and answer some questions if you are too vague.
Link:[N/A as of right now]So here are some Rules
1) You may not copy another person's entry; if a copy is found the second post will be disqualified and may or may not have their entry null from future contest themes.
2) You can use anything to your disposal to make yourself stand out it be pictures as a reference or simple drawings/sketch.
3) The topic does not have to solely be around martial artists and could range from Isekai abilities, Western-oriented Style, Magicians, and/or MMO characters as to not create barriers for other people's creativity.
4) Every Friday 8 PM PST, the contest will end and the one with the most votes from the community will be chosen as the winner. If ever so people had cheated by using alt accounts or other forms of unlawful conduct of some sort, the winner will be void and the runner-up will be chosen.
5) If the forum is too large to accurately measure the number of votes, I will add a link with a poll for entries for that week.Typical entry will involved
[Name of Person] - Name of the welder of the so-called entity
[Race of Person] - Depending in the world it is set in, there might be a multitude of races other than humans. You may also include their land orientation. You can also add a description of their physical characteristics and personality [Optional].
[Name of Soul/Ability/Talent/Item] - Name/Title of the Soul/Ability/Talent. Preferably bold
[Detailed/Brief Description of Soul/Ability/Talent/Item] - As the name suggests, a description of the Soul/Ability/Talent that your welder uses
[World Setting] - Eastern/Western Oriented. Might also be other genres such as Sci-Fi/Steam Punk, etc. Or other worlds from other novels or series such as Harry Potter, DBZ, Naruto, Douluo Dalu, as long as it is not intrusive or infringes on that series setting that ruins immersion.
[Visual (Mental or Physical) traits of the prescribed entity on top] - Traits that make it out of the ordinary than the rest of the abilities in the world setting that you chose.
[Types of skill one could use with such description above. (May it be spells, skills, and/or martial soul rings from Douluo Dalu with ability linking with that soul)] - Abilities that your Soul/Ability/Talent/Item can produce when in combat or other usages it has outside of battle. If you use Soul Land as your oriented world, you will have to list the name of the beast soul, its age, and color of the Soul Ring and the influence/ability it has over the spiritual soul your welder has.
[History of the recipient of the Soul/Ability/Talent] - What the welder has done in his/her life that could end to their demise or their ascension to further mystical realms. Such as either a timeline on when they gathered materials to grow stronger or emotionally attached/cherishable moments in their life.Any other categories[Other than examples above] is optional and may/may not increase your odds of being chosen (Depending on the voters).
And to vote for a entry, you just have to like the entry/comment
The first theme will last until March 15, 2019 8:00 PM PST. Or 15/04/2019.
The Theme will be
Ancient
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I'm sorry to seem impatient (which is a terrible flaw I have), but is there a queue that you work with and when will uh Ehem cough cough Fallen cough Throne be reviewed.
Sorry to bother. And what you're doing is very cool and appreciative.olufemi24 If you click on format, pic & video guide, you can see how to add a link. The link is the url when you just click your novel on webnovel (and not inkstone).
To make a link, put brackets like this [] and parenthesis with NO SPACE with the link from webnovel.
So it be something like [My Link/Or Name of Novel]/(webnoveldotcom/somerandomdamnnumbers)
Without the "/".It's not rocket science and I really want to keep this thread clean besides praise for the almighty goddess' creations set upon the mortal plain or her prayers of lawful acolytes and deacons with austerity that watch over this so-called holy ground. Please do delete your replies and so will I after you like this post or make a reply.
Pizz I don't know how an assembly line is gonna listen to you because Top Ramen is instant ramen from a Japanese company. It's either me not getting the joke or my nitpickiness on what you just said. Also, it's the go-to food for college students who're strapped on cash. It's either r/woooosh to me or you.
Wordcount. One SS for 200 words. Either that chapter has around 800 words and the other has 1,000 words. Writers sometimes write chapters over one event or setting just to increase word count to get more money. Or even repeating certain paragraphs as a continuation to artificially make a filler chapter.
So um, these are mine. I hope some of them work so I don't have to change much in my novel but nothing's ever perfect. Also, can you suggest me a name for a guy who uses super strong ice abilities? Just like his temperament; he is cold, ruthless, and definitely heartless. But not the main character of course. Sorry for taking your time.
Bai Li [MC-]
Da Yuan
Fan Tong
Jia Yan
Ju Dun
Khu Bei
Mo Tian
Shi Qigang
Wei Tao
Yue Su
Yue Yong
Zhao Fei
Zhao KufeiIt's either you're posting your chapters on times that a lot of people not on web novel. Or it's just unpopular.
Chapter 1's structure is quite weird and how there's a lot of periods and commas in any given moment. Also, you add space when you comma or put a period. I don't know about your view issue but personally, I'm not into the BL genre. Your word choices are also a bit 'off'. Take that as whatever you want.
I hope your issue gets resolved.
Yushirou edit your form. You need the link to your novel.
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I'm kind of sorry for all of my requests so you can make this low priority or even just scrap it. You've already helped me enough give me the expectations I've needed but my commitment to my novels are getting really hard at this moment. Just gotta say thanks.
TITLE: Chaos Emerges: Chimera
AUTHOR NAME/USERNAME:BeyondBreaking or Beyond Breaking
SUBTITLE (by this, I mean if you want any other words, quote, etc. on the cover): "Judgement in Slaughter" or none at all if it doesn't really fit your artistic eye. Or just another quote
GENRE:Dark Fantasy, Gore, Adventure, Nonhuman MC
SYNOPSIS (of your book. This gives me a general idea of what I need to make or edit):Humankind will always walk the path of destruction, and many who acknowledge such facts chose to deny it. Their entire purpose is to find a way to slow down or stop the chaos from spreading, even going against morals in doing so.The world of Zenira had seen better days in the Enlightenment than any other, but dark natures have infested in the minds of those who rose to the challenge. Gods have watched with patience to decide the fate with humanity and one had thought they had broken the final straw. They were trying to play the gods as they birthed new life.
"With my body, I sacrifice to make all repent for their sins under the blade I call Judgement"
Sacrificing his body as a suitable vessel to procure his wrath, he decided to twist the very world at its core, birthing a semblance in the monster they had very created with fate.
Watch on as the being they have created will cause the annihilation of their race.
IDEAS (please don't be too specific. But that doesn't mean leave this blank. If you want a person (or people), then give me a hair color/gender/eye color. Please note, I can do a maximum of two people on each cover. Also, if you already have an image or images you want to be used, then post the link or links.):An amalgamation of a monstrosity(preferably scaly but anything works) razing an entire town with people fleeing in terror. Eyes glaring with deep dark hatred and raw ferocity.
(Or go crazy and do whatever. Mostly every idea are just recommendations and you know what's best likely whether time efficient and creativity.)
Or a small creature with a ghostly aura that resembles a mad god-like figure.LINK (no link, no cover.):https://www.webnovel.com/book/12748962605032505/Chaos-Emerges%3A-Chimera
Just got to repeat myself again and thank you if you take this lowly request of mine. Oh praise the goodwill and compasion granted by the Goddess to us.
Question: Which cover on this thread do you like the most or was the most time consuming? And was it worth it? And how's your day going?
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kakalo I can't say much about translation quantity but the one with TDG is because of a contract. The author has to slow down his writing for their comic adaptation to catch up. Which is WAYS before reaching so have fun with that. I only remember this from memory so it is not credible.
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What happens if you already made the novel and just place it in the category? I've made it before the writing prompt. but I don't have any chapters up yet but I set up the title, synopsis, and cover. Am I still legible to place it in?
Let's sing around a campfire and sing the campfire song
I like mint chocolate. Anyone who goes against me will automatically be wrong, no need proving.
Can I request a review swap with my novel?
It's called Fallen Throne
Anyone who wants for me to review there's can reply and I'll review yours as well.-Finds an ancient technique to cultivate. (or has a strange foundation/physique).
-Some form of tournament trope.
-MC is either first or second - causing some spark with the antagonist of that ark.
-Some form of assassination group or evil organization tries to assassinate mc.
-Survives by BS luck or some plain ol' plot armor.silentscarlettt On another note, are the words supposed to be lowercased or is it like that.