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Demonic_angel, no problem. And will do. Fortunately I'm already following your webnovel's discord.

Demonic_angel, do you still need an editor? If so I could help with the minor editing errors that slip through your editing and proofreading. I don't mind not getting paid as I could put it down as experience. Plus I enjoy reading your webnovel so it would be nice to help you improve it.

My apologies for the late reply; it took me a while to organize my recommendations and critiques of your webnovel so far as I feel that a lot of improvements could be made. Some criticisms that I would point out is that there are a lot of inconsistencies and unclear elements due to word choice. In the fifth paragraph of the first chapter, for example, the deity is referred to as "the law" by the main character named Law but then later in the same paragraph you use "Word" to refer to the deity as. This is in contrast to the majority of times where you use "the man" or "mysterious figure" when referring to the deity. There are several instances where the wrong grammar usage for exclamatory sentences is used. For example, in paragraph eight of chapter three you wrote "! I will exterminate my enemies, and I will slaughter those who get in my way!" (I would recommend deleting the exclamation point at the beginning of sentences like that). Finally at the end of chapter three you name the innate ability that the main character awakens "Blood Raises" but in chapter four you call it "Rais de Sangre." I know that it's a translation error but it did throw me off for a moment as a reader. I would say that most of my critiques and recommendations are concerned with editing as I believe that a lot of editing would vastly improve the readability. Also a recommendation that is not about editing or grammar but I would recommend changing "records" to something like "[status]" or "[status window]". I did leave out quite a bit of my recommendations, because it was mostly all editing stuff, basically a lot of editing stuff, and I did not want to overstep my boundaries.
Hopefully what I did provide was helpful though.

Hi, I've read the first chapter and there are quite a few critiques and recommendations that I have so far. However, I want to finish reading the rest of the chapters you have so far before replying with my critiques and recommendations. But what I have read seems like it would be something I would enjoy reading.

I'm participating in NaNoWriMo this year let me get the link to share. It's an old story idea that I once had but never did anything with.

Just checking but is this supposed to be part of the description for the webnovel or part of the first chapter? It's not bad but it's not good either.

Can the inversion of the adorable kid trope, like the deliberately cute child trope or the enfant terrible trope, be used in the adorable kid writing prompt contest?