Hi, First of all, those who hate Fan-Fic please don't spoil this discussion.
I am writing a Pokemon Fan-Fic and I wanted to write an emotional scene and I did but I am not satisfied with the chapters. I want someone to help him modify so that people can feel what I want to express in the chapters. I am a newbie and I don't want to disappoint the readers. Any help will be appreciated.
The chapters are on google docs. If you want to help please edit it and send it to my email. umair_awan007@yahoo.com
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NbfMRreXzpMyRubFkr1krgeL8BYla0i5CvPTsFHirrA/edit?usp=sharing
The fan-fic is Pokemon An Adventure...
https://www.webnovel.com/book/12813607006504505/Pokemon%3A-An-Adventure